Dark Poetry #3 |
Drab Defeat |
Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Mocking Death he stole his shroud, Softly meek, Demands her be slow and loud, Yawning at her gray boredom She’s so weak, Eventually she’s done, Shakily standing accepts, Quiet voice, Shuttled out in shuffle steps, To be held for ninety days, Without choice, They’re going to mend her ways, But there is too great a crowd, Huddled there, Only noticed are the loud, Whom squeak the noisy wheel, They get care, But dignity they will steal From twelve in the space of eight, Huddled there, For destruction’s three month wait. Gloom |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
I like this because it makes me think. It seems as if you're talking about some therapy program or something similar. I could be wrong, bit it is interesting the way you say what you do in your work. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
interesting...the tale told could fit several circumstances it seems... but it also seems it was written with one particular one in your mind... nice read... |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Yes, a variety of circumstances come to mind with this one, so are you going to enlighten us? Or leave us guessing?? Quite a tale you weave too, well done!!!! Isis *The greatest warrior is one that does not need to fight* ~Isis~ |
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Ginners Member
since 2000-07-22
Posts 339Mullica Hill, New Jersey |
I like this and so many things come to mind, maybe it is silly but the first thought that came to mind was the witch hunts in the old old days. oh well that's just me. but i like this. "I'll build a wall if we can keep them on the other side"-NIN |
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citizenx Member
since 2001-07-31
Posts 189motorcade |
somewhat cryptic I pictured worse case scenario for a woman's dignity being taken. A very haunting and dark musing. Powerful words. "the blizzard of the world has crossed the threshold and it has overturned |
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alibaster Member
since 2001-07-07
Posts 299In my own private hell...(PA). |
...and once again upon my attempted return from vaction with Depression your words amaze me, linger in my mind and scream the volumes that I can not... Thank you... ali "There is an alter ego which dwells within every soul." (C)alibaster 1999-2001 "Sleep those little slices of death, how I loathe them." Edgar Allan [This message has been edited by alibaster (edited 08-27-2001).] |
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