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Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2001-08-09 12:17 PM


Sitting there
Unaware in a puddle of puZzled parts
she rambles through unmatched edges
contemplating the outcome
Unwary with eyes blurry, staring there
Across stormed streets still steaming

Black market washes corners
making completion impossible,
Trying to steal her mind
focused, on picking up the
pieces
moistened by the rain,
pain now swirls toward the drain,
she notices
nothing.

Gloom


© Copyright 2001 Aszard Drazlom - All Rights Reserved
Spine Grinder
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since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...
1 posted 2001-08-09 06:34 PM


wow....how deep.....i liked it.

death is certain, life is not
have u ever needed somebody so bad, u cry when u arent around them, and still miss them when u r around them?

maeve
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since 2001-08-01
Posts 139
In the Outback
2 posted 2001-08-10 07:04 AM


Thought provoking work and interesting presentation, Prof Gloom. I liked it.

Maeve

Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082
of Depression
3 posted 2001-08-10 02:29 PM


Thank you, Spine Grinder & maeve
I am glad you enjoyed

Gloom

poutprincess
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since 2000-07-06
Posts 735
Perth, Western Australia, Australia
4 posted 2001-08-11 09:33 AM


i really liked this...i got a very vivid image from this...very nice Gloom.
~Dawn

Carolina
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since 2001-08-17
Posts 224
Myrtle Beach, SC
5 posted 2001-08-18 12:01 PM


Very nice.  I'm definitely going to read more of your posts.
Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082
of Depression
6 posted 2001-08-19 12:38 PM



Thank you, Pout Princess,
I am pleased that I cold give you
An Image with my words that you might enjoy.

Thank you very much, Carolina,
I am honored that your first post
Is a response to my poem, my humble writings.

Gloom

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