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Dark Kisses
Member

since 2001-06-24

Posts 364
Flat lands of Kansas

0 posted 2001-07-31 01:28 PM

Watching you in the distance
As your walk turns into a glide
Each step reaches closer to me
You move with so much pride

I can feel my stomach tighten
The butterflies start to flutter
A smile enlightens my face
As my heart begins to putter

Our eyes seem to meet
In a land meant for just us
Oh how I want you to love me
You are the only one I lust

Reaching out your hand
Reaching just for me
Wanting to feel your warmth
It's only you I see

The sky suddenly turns dark
Thunder starts to roll
Lightening begins to strike
I lose all sense of control

I reach for your hand
Yet I grab only air
Where did you go?
Why didnt you care?

Don't fear your tears!

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

1 posted 2001-07-31 01:32 PM

Very nicely done,
an enjoyable read.

Gloom

Hellseyes
Member

since 2001-07-25

Posts 120
Kansas, USA

2 posted 2001-07-31 03:00 PM

this is truly a wonderful write....look forward to more of your work../Drew/

allis4angel
Member

since 2001-04-10

Posts 82
Portugal

3 posted 2001-08-03 05:12 PM

Congratulations, just perfect.
Thank you for posting "feelings" like this one.

Jenn Cirrincione

Member Elite

since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

4 posted 2001-08-03 06:24 PM

Oh wow.. I really liked this one... lots!! I think it's great. I wish I could be more precise as to what I loved about it... but it's overall wonderful!!

Jenn

"Baby I've been drifting away, dreaming all day, of holding you, touching you, the only thing that I wanna do is be with you..."Faith Hill

G. A. Webb
Member

since 2000-01-21

Posts 441
Stanton, California, USA

5 posted 2001-08-03 06:40 PM

Ya know, I started reading this and thought to myself, "who's the lucky guy". But then the end got me...cool!!! Great piece Mags!!!

G

Jessica

Member

since 2001-06-28

Posts 350
South AL

6 posted 2001-08-05 03:19 AM

I've felt this way before. You showed your emotions very well; letting us know how much you love him then painting the true picture in the end. Great job!

~Jess

EagleOne
Member Elite

since 2000-03-07

Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...

7 posted 2001-08-10 10:39 AM

Well done, but yeah, it's a hollow feeling when you're left grasping at air.

"Let me pierce the realm of glamour
So I know just what I am." ~ Van Morrison

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