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Hellseyes
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since 2001-07-25
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Kansas, USA

0 posted 2001-07-26 11:53 AM


slaughter the world before me
an unmerciful plague unleashed
let the fires of hell devour earth
the demons and monsters set free
one watching the chaos from the shadows
it is my spirit set free from all good
a merciless and black-hearted creature
desire and commands for death
not one with both their eyes
cut them in half with a rusted blade
throw them into bubbling pools of acid
their tongues wrenched from their mouths
death to all who oppose me
their hair ripped from its scalp
kill them all in the glance of an eye
let the entire world be slaughtered before me
and let the last death be mine
it will be a death slow and painful
make my death one must unimaginable
slaughter the world


© Copyright 2001 Drew - All Rights Reserved
Dark Kisses
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since 2001-06-24
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1 posted 2001-07-26 01:05 PM


Holy!!!     This one is something else.  The visuals may give me nightmares  

Mags

Don't fear your tears!

Hellseyes
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since 2001-07-25
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Kansas, USA
2 posted 2001-07-26 03:45 PM


well thank you for such a great response...no really thats what i want to hear about my work.../Drew/
DarkenedShadow
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since 2001-07-23
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Kansas
3 posted 2001-07-26 03:53 PM


Out to scare us all Hellseyes, thats okay because we all will look at the world like this sometimes and see... there's truth here. Peace my man be at peace... /nick/
Dark Kisses
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4 posted 2001-07-26 11:59 PM


Okay Okay let me re-word my first response.  It did have a great visual effect to it and it flowed together quite well.  You are very good at writing so others can literally picture it!

Mags


(better?)  

Hellseyes
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since 2001-07-25
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Kansas, USA
5 posted 2001-07-27 12:09 PM


thank you all very much but dont be afraid to tell me how i can improve...thanx again..../Drew/
Engel_Dragon_Eyes
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6 posted 2001-07-27 06:48 PM


Ahh... that was wonderful....  *sniff* Makes me sad to think I can't write as well.  
Jessica
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7 posted 2001-07-28 03:38 AM


*trembling* Okay. *pulls herself back together* Definately a freaky piece. Such detail and darkness...   I likes!!
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