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Scarlet Lady
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since 2000-02-11
Posts 242
Midwest

0 posted 2001-07-20 07:50 PM


Lay It All Down For You?

What would you give for that?
When your heart is double minded?
Can a heart be divided and truly love?

I wonder?
How could it?

Would you take my gift?
Would it be precious?
Or just another prize?

Would life be different somehow?
Or would it be clouded in the storm?
Would you see my love as real?
Or want more to fill the vanity?

Does it make a difference at all?
That I would lay it all down for you?

I wonder?

© Copyright 2001 Lynne - All Rights Reserved
Dark Kisses
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since 2001-06-24
Posts 364
Flat lands of Kansas
1 posted 2001-07-24 12:29 PM


I have wondered it too.  Every man I have ran acrossed has never taken me seriously.  I have so much to give yet they only look at my outter beauty not the inner beauty.  So sad  

Good write,
Mags

Don't fear your tears!

Marilyn
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since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada
2 posted 2001-07-24 12:09 PM


Would you see my love as real?
Or want more to fill the vanity?


Ahhh....you hit the nail on the head! Some are in relationships just for vanity's sake.


Nice job!

Marilyn

Hellseyes
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since 2001-07-25
Posts 120
Kansas, USA
3 posted 2001-07-26 04:11 PM


undoubtly something we have all wondered about in our lives...good write../Drew/
Jessica
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since 2001-06-28
Posts 350
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4 posted 2001-07-31 03:12 AM


Would life be different somehow?
Or would it be clouded in the storm?
Would you see my love as real?
Or want more to fill the vanity?

My favorite stanza...   Awesome write!!  

WRBreezin
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since 2001-08-04
Posts 212

5 posted 2001-08-15 08:30 AM


Equally somber, and inviting...I enjoyed this one greatly.

Willie

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