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Blaec
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since 2001-04-23
Posts 130
The Sunshine State

0 posted 2001-07-18 11:48 PM



Was this your intent, your plan?
Did you set out to destroy me?
To ruin all that I am?
Are you happy now that you hurt me too?
Do you sleep better at night knowing what
I'm going through?
Does it feel good?
Paying me back for my lies.
Putting me in my place.
Watching the tears fall from my eyes.
Ripping out my heart with just the
words that you say.
Me at your mercy.
My sanity slipping away.


Kris

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Dark Kisses
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since 2001-06-24
Posts 364
Flat lands of Kansas
1 posted 2001-07-19 12:31 PM


Wow!  Good questions here!!
anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797
Limbo
2 posted 2001-07-20 10:43 AM


The ending was really good. Because you posed the question THEN ran with the final thought, it finished it off very nicely. The rhyme scheme you had ran well and the wording was great as well.
Although it's a short piece, it says a lot and I can relate it easily.

Thanks for the read.  

~AF~

Psychopathic chickens are plotting against me...

[This message has been edited by anonymousfemale (edited 07-20-2001).]

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