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silent whispers Junior Member
since 2001-07-07
Posts 40Alaska |
**** We're one you and I pure white snow blanketing the earth innocence combined with death rebirth and caos intertwined Consider me the blackness churned over by the thaw created by those lost memmories that drove past kicking up dirt around your boarder We are the same the black ink on the page of white rusted metal on the family car my dirt hides your coat wash me away as you will I will return Bury me under grass I still sit there waiting The yarn of life is not solid twisted strains of emotions woven thoughts and dreams Don not believe you are purer than the babe new born life itself created me inside your soul. **** |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Welcome! I like this...gentle, with imagery I can see...yet the gentleness doesn't exclude the depth and emotion... just curious - why don't you want your spelling mistakes pointed out? Don't you think that correct spelling is vital to the flow of your poem? Again - welcome...and check your email...   KI am a refugee of logic...insisting |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Like this...James |
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