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Fading Away
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0 posted 2001-06-26 01:28 PM


It's the fearless haze,
finding its way into my mind,
Seeping through my conscious,
laying its ground,
Creating my craze...

The blanket which covers all reason,
in these moments of dark silence
that suffocate my soul...
I see life through a tiny hole,
each day from the same season.
My phantom hovering in my head
wants me alone.
It's jealous of my real strength.
It weaves these threads so tight
that I see nothing,
except where I've bled.

One unpossessed moment in the night,
a sliver of love seeps through,
and cuts into my sore heart.
It carves with the knife,
what I've needed for my fight...
This weapon of choice
lays heavy in my hands
I refuse to succumb
to the phantom’s demands.
It is the rebirth of my “own” self,
my own voice,
my own life.

--Marie

You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds.

© Copyright 2001 Jennifer Floyd - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-06-26 09:24 PM


Good work like always... Talented writer you are.  Well now this poem is gonna be on my mind... so I am gonna print it off and try and come up with a good name for it   I'm sure you could do it... I always write my poems before I write the name too.  Maybe the name could be.....Well I dunno I just spent 5 min thinking of it..   well i'll post if my ignorent mind can think of anything. great job on the poem.
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2 posted 2001-06-28 03:50 AM


wow!..this was quite the deep piece...very dark as well and the ending powerful!!...written very well...and it came across also very intense...well...hope to see more from you here  ...bye Marie

[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 06-28-2001).]

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