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LadyPeach1
Member

since 2001-06-04

Posts 282

0 posted 2001-06-20 11:52 PM

She felt alone,
She felt scared,
she felt like no one,
not anyone cared,
her life she now held,
in her own hands,
knowing and thinking,
no one understands,
feelings and emotions,
race through her head,
she wished they would just go away,
she wished that she was dead,
she wished all the demons,
would disappear out of her head,
Dreams of having a future,
Hopes of one day being a wife,
feeling anger and sadness,
Of her once good, now ruined life,
She will never be the same,
Her life has now fallen apart,
for the world has given her misery and grief,
and given her a heavy heart...

ShadowLost
Junior Member

since 2001-06-23

Posts 43

1 posted 2001-06-25 02:20 PM

Too many heavy hearts it seems.....I'm there with you Girl. Such truth in the depth of sad despair. Look up to the heavens for there lies truth and love.

~ShadowLost~

...and now these three things remain: faith, hope and love. But, the greatest of these is love. 1 Corinthians 13.13

EagleOne
Member Elite

since 2000-03-07

Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...

2 posted 2001-06-26 04:20 AM

A sad piece! It's been my experience that in time all hearts lighten, take care!

"Friends are quiet angels who lift us to our
feet when our wings have trouble remembering how to fly." ~unknown

Verve
Member

since 1999-06-23

Posts 348
Singapore

3 posted 2001-06-26 11:39 AM

This is heart-wrenching ... You wrote well ...

~verve

LadyPeach1
Member

since 2001-06-04

Posts 282

4 posted 2001-06-26 12:55 PM

Thank you everyone for the feed back. I appreciate it so much!! LadyPeach1

obscurity of cloud
Member

since 2001-05-11

Posts 294
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5 posted 2001-06-29 03:56 AM

your use of anaphora is very potent and definetly catches the eye. A great poem; keep writing.

"so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost

taramw
Senior Member

since 2000-06-08

Posts 738

6 posted 2001-06-29 04:50 AM

Oh, I really felt the despair emanating from every line. Sometimes life can be tough. Take care.

may you live all the days of your life. -- jonathan swift

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