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brian madden
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0 posted 2001-06-18 02:44 PM


I retain perfect anonymity
cut from the confines of locality,
parading neighbours
are attained as mere strangers.

Is this privilege not my birth bestowed
to root readily quoting native code?

I was not baptised to prosper,
My feet are refused in foster.
A heart so weary,
denied a cradle conjoined with history.

The canal trembles of overcast perpetual,
its temples breathe routine rural ritual.
Destiny dealt
the exile hand below the monolith.

My elders here held court
'fore trading frugality of fort,
choosing an inoculated tomb.
They gave countenance in a domestic heirloom.

The cult of outside fails to seep thro' this threshold.
To ambling field and orchard my loyalty is gold.

"Build a man a fire, he'll be warm for a day. Set a man on fire and he'll be warm for the rest of his life". Terry Pratchett

© Copyright 2001 brian madden - All Rights Reserved
FoxXena
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since 2001-06-13
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where dragons play, children run free and foxes are never hunted
1 posted 2001-06-19 06:02 PM


That is...weird.

*+*Would you be known by everybody? Then you know nobody.~
-Publilus Syrus*+*

[This message has been edited by FoxXena (edited 06-19-2001).]

brian madden
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ireland
2 posted 2001-06-19 06:17 PM


OK I never got a weird before.... thanks for the reply. It seems quite normal to me though, I must be weird... it figures and explains alot about my child hood. It all
Sudhir Iyer
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3 posted 2001-06-20 09:16 AM


brian, my friend, I like the way you rounded the subject up here... wonderful work...

pretty sharp images as well... but that is your forte, is it not...

Regards,
sudhir

"I was born intelligent - education ruined me"

Michael
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4 posted 2001-06-20 05:50 PM


You know, I have some very stout reasons why the word "excommunication" rings a very harsh tone in my ears.  I won't get into detail here but let's just say I'll never understand why this is supposedly a "Godly" act.  The wounds I have seen personally inflicted by those doing the excommunicating are far worse than any sin which may have brought forth the act in most cases.

Just my two cents - very well written, Brian.
Michael

Verve
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5 posted 2001-06-22 09:36 AM



Hi Brian ...

A vivid piece of work you have here. I like.  


~verve

EagleOne
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6 posted 2001-06-26 03:53 AM


I think well written is closer than weird,  but hey that's just my opinion!  

"Friends are quiet angels who lift us to our
feet when our wings have trouble remembering how to fly." ~unknown


brian madden
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7 posted 2001-06-26 03:34 PM


Michael, excommunication the ultimate price for disobeying God. thank you for sharing your thoughts and for your very kind words.

verve, thank you.


Eagle, thanks  


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