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mirror man
Senior Member

since 2001-01-08

Posts 814

0 posted 2001-06-16 09:43 PM

sickness

And when the sickness came upon him
nearly half a century of his life had passed.

Pain and unrest were his daily companions.
A distant call to the only one he loved
the only one who loved him
said she could not visit.

And the days were long and hot.
If he needed a thing,
he must do it.
If not
then he must not need it.

Now dreams troubled him,
jumbled memories of people forgotten
places, things, meanings, feelings,
a time so foreign
it was as if he were someone else.
And he would awake with a pounding heart
and an overwhelming fear.
And nothing was there.

And no one calls
and no one answers
and the senses turn everything
to gray
wherein he saw the void
filled with voices saying
Despair, come to me.
And he was drawn
and repelled.

Darkness, light,
darkness, light,
fits of tears,
fits of anger.
The days passed so.

And then the world moved
before his eyes.
And there was light
color, music, laughter,
the life of the many,
the life of love.
And the voice said
I offer this gift to you.
The life of the self
for the self
by the self
has no meaning.
Come to me.

And he said to me
I look around
and see only myself.
All the things I live for
have no meaning to me.
I injure no one
yet care has turned to an evil wish
and smiles have turned to sneers.
My life is a daily battle with despair.

I know the darkness well,
but not the light.

How does one live in light?

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

1 posted 2001-06-18 10:45 PM

MM - I have to say this is SUPERB, and definitely my favourite of yours...stunning: in word order, in image, in stylism...

And he said to me
I look around
and see only myself.
All the things I live for
have no meaning to me.
I injure no one
yet care has turned to an evil wish
and smiles have turned to sneers.
My life is a daily battle with despair.

love that section...

well done!

K

LadyPeach1
Member

since 2001-06-04

Posts 282

2 posted 2001-06-18 10:50 PM

My oh my, That was an AWESOME poem. You did a BEAUTIFUL job on that and you did GREAT putting it together! That was such a wonderful poem. GREAT JOB! TOTALLY GREAT JOB!

LadyPeach1

BitterSmoke
Member

since 2001-01-02

Posts 54

3 posted 2001-06-20 03:58 PM

hmmm. A journey similar to my own.

mirror man
Senior Member

since 2001-01-08

Posts 814

4 posted 2001-06-21 11:32 PM

Thank you all very much. Yes, inspired by pain. I was going to change it, but I was sick when I wrote it. I'm not sure about it any more.

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