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Dark Poetry #3

within my bedroom

Ina
Senior Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

0 posted 2001-06-14 10:21 PM

OK its been awhile since my last post here.

The shadow on the wall
creeps along the darkned
night
a chill races down my spine
tears form in my eyes
the forms that take place
push me to the edge
cowering underneath my duvet
I close my eyes
count to ten
and try and breath
I need air
it is stifling under here
someone help me
im so afraid.
where is my love?
why arent u in the bed with me?
you promised to protect me!
Help i feel like im fading
away
All within my own bedroom

Regina

not my best. i know

If you only understood my pain then maybe you could learn to be my friend. Be there. My crying shoulder. The smiles. And the caring i need to survive.

allis4angel
Member

since 2001-04-10

Posts 82
Portugal

1 posted 2001-06-15 04:43 AM

Very nice.
I loved it.
Congratulations.

LadyPeach1
Member

since 2001-06-04

Posts 282

2 posted 2001-06-15 01:21 PM

Very nice poem, you did a good job!
LadyPeach1

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

3 posted 2001-06-26 01:29 PM

Good job, Ina! I really liked this one.

--Marie

Verve
Member

since 1999-06-23

Posts 348
Singapore

4 posted 2001-06-27 09:52 AM

Nice piece you have here.

I enjoyed the read.

~verve

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

5 posted 2001-06-28 03:40 AM

great job! on teh poem...it came to me as being intense...enjoyed a LOT...bye Ina

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

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