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0 posted 2001-06-05 11:06 PM



Hey guys! I posted this a while ago in the Teen Forum and i just brought it up and wanted to see what you guys thought of it! So here ya go  

I would do anything for you,
To make you see a brighter day.
I'd do the impossible,
Just to take all your pain away.
I've been there alone,
By your side through it all.
I was the one dedicated to lift u from darkness,
If you happened to slip and fall.
I love u with all my heart,
I'll never love another in this way.
No matter what shall happen between us,
Forever implanted in my heart you will stay.
Im the one your meant to be with,
And soon this for yourself you will see.
We're meant to be together,
But just not right now is what kills me.

© Copyright 2001 Michele - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-06-06 12:41 PM


very emotional poem here...i liked how you expressed it...and i hope everything turns out the best for you michele ...bye

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2 posted 2001-06-06 01:37 AM


hellow it's me from teen, but i have to say i read a lot in here but just never answered anything but any way i realy like this poem
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3 posted 2001-06-06 07:08 AM


Thanks guys!!!! LOL Crazy i feel all special now that you dont reply to any poems in here but u chose to reply to mine   Hehehe...N e wayz thanks a lot for replyin guys!!!  
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4 posted 2001-06-06 07:34 AM


ShUgArHiGh,
passionate poem, I like the way you put it together.
Write on
Kethry

Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life.  Patty Hansen.



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5 posted 2001-06-06 11:17 AM


Hey Shugar!!
I love this poem, it was absolutely BEAUTIFUL!  I really really liked it alot!!
That is a wonderful poem!

Keep up the good work!

LadyPeach1

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6 posted 2001-06-06 01:57 PM


Thanks everyone!!  
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7 posted 2001-06-06 02:40 PM


I love this poem too. Sweet..or bitter sweet. Great job!  

I can't control
my destiny
I trust my soul,
my only goal
is just to "be"
-Lyrics from RENT

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8 posted 2001-06-06 05:07 PM


Very nice, I am living this piece right now. Thanks for sharing.
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9 posted 2001-06-06 07:30 PM


I like the "honesty" of this write.
Whats amazing to me is the human capacity to seek the quaintness of love for all of its hope...then turn around and blast love as a farce.  Reminds me ironicaly (even though not the same subject) of michelle ma belle by the beatles and thus perhaps the side of love I should be paying more attention too.

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