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kansas-jim
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since 2001-06-05
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Willits,Ca

0 posted 2001-06-05 06:02 PM




Squeeze of a trigger
Swallow of a pill
Your mind starts racing
But your heart is standing still

Feeding on your emotion
Like a parsite lost in confusion

No will to die

© Copyright 2001 Jim Foster - All Rights Reserved
kansas-jim
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since 2001-06-05
Posts 22
Willits,Ca
1 posted 2001-06-05 06:43 PM


Please dont take this to seriously.I love fiction.
Dopey Dope
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2 posted 2001-06-05 07:36 PM


Welcome to Passions.
I can see that this is your first post and it seems at the end of this that the character of your poem had no will to actually go through with the action of taking his life. I enjoyed this, but urge you to check the guidelines about suicidal content. This could approach boderline. Anyhow, I hope to see you around here more.
Good luck with everything!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

SEA
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3 posted 2001-06-05 10:10 PM


wow...strong first post...but like Dopey said...be careful on the suicide stuff...read the guidelines  and let me say....Welcome   ~SEA
kansas-jim
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Willits,Ca
4 posted 2001-06-05 10:32 PM


Thanks for the warm welcome . I do love life and am very interested in your site.
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5 posted 2001-06-05 11:04 PM


Welcome to Passions!! Nice to have ya here   loved the first post and i cant wait to see more!
Temptress*Moon
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since 2001-01-15
Posts 240
Long Island, NY
6 posted 2001-06-05 11:20 PM


Excellent first POST!
Held my brealth while reading this one  
Temptress*Moon


I slept and dreamed that life was beauty was thy dream then a shadowy lie? -ESH-

Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
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Victoria Australia
7 posted 2001-06-06 07:24 AM


Kansas Jim,
Welcome to passions. Please observe the no suicide and no adult references signs as you enter. Sit back, relax, enjoy your flight into fantasy. We hope you have safe travelling with us.
Kethry

Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life.  Patty Hansen.



angelbear
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since 2001-05-22
Posts 139
North East, USA
8 posted 2001-06-06 02:55 PM


Great work here. Enjoyed the art very much.  

I can't control
my destiny
I trust my soul,
my only goal
is just to "be"
-Lyrics from RENT

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