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G. A. Webb Member
since 2000-01-21
Posts 441Stanton, California, USA |
To live without risk Is not living at all You must take a chance Although you may fall For walking the safe road And not on the ball Leads only one place To a spirit so small So do tread on boldly I'm telling you all Conquer your fears And knock down the wall But you must move quickly And try not to stall For life it slips fast Towards your last call And when it's all over You can stand tall Confident in knowing That you did it all You've passed all the tests Both great and the small Living the adventure Of destiny's call For living without risk Isn't living at all G. A. Webb Regret not that which you have done, Rather that which you haven't [This message has been edited by G. A. Webb (edited 06-05-2001).] |
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Rebelious Member
since 2001-05-27
Posts 57Kansas, USA |
I love every poem you post!!! You are a great writer and you show me I have alot to learn. Thanks for this one! |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
You raise some interesting thoughts, some of which would make for good debate.  Well done, as always!"Friends are quiet angels who lift us to our |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
GA Webb, This is an excellent poem, but if you want to tighten it a little here are a few suggestions. Strictly spelling or grammer corrections of course. Did you mean concur (to agree) in the 11th line or were you wanting to put conquer (to overcome). It's just that if you meant the first you also need a 'with' to make sense of it. in the 21st line you wrote you've past the test it should be you've passed the test and I would take out all in the same line. Other than that it's a great poem and I like the message too. Write on Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I absolutely loved this poem...it had so much truth in it and i completely agree!! |
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LadyPeach1 Member
since 2001-06-04
Posts 282 |
Wonderful poem G.A. Webb! It was great! And it is so totally true! I loved it! LadyPeach1 |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
we all need reminding of this piece of wisdom now and then. enjoyed your words. "Build a man a fire, he'll be warm for a day. Set a man on fire and he'll be warm for the rest of his life". Terry Pratchett |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
  Keth Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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G. A. Webb Member
since 2000-01-21
Posts 441Stanton, California, USA |
Rebelious: Why thank you so much. I’m glad that you enjoy my writing. I don’t know how much one can learn from me, but I’ll do my best. Thanks again! EagleOne: Thank you sir, I’m glad you liked it as well. And for the record, I enjoy reading your pieces as well. Kethry: Thank you for catching my mistakes. I suppose I should proof read better in the future before posting. But you knew what I was meaning even though the spell checker didn’t catch it. I had the words in mind that you suggested originally but in my haste whilst writing this piece I overlooked the fact that I had put in the wrong words. I think it’s much better now. Thanks again for catching those mistakes! ShUgArHiGhx & LadyPeach1: Thank you both for your kind remarks. I’m glad you liked this piece. Brian madden: I agree, we all need reminding from time to time. Too many people take the easy way and don’t realize that they are missing out on a hold world of adventure just because they are too afraid or are too comfortable in their situations to take a risk. To win it all one must be willing to risk it all even though you might loose. And even in loss one still wins to some extent because of the knowledge that was gained from having taken the risk in the first place. Dose that make since? Well, it dose to me. Thanks again! G Regret not that which you have done, |
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