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DJLI
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since 2000-06-21
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TN, USA

0 posted 2001-05-28 08:44 PM


Every time I feel the rage coming,
like a silent storm racing through our world.
And every time it leaves me crying,
each tear a reminder of what was.
Our world, taken from us so harshly,
so beautiful, is now lost.
The two of us, left alone in the darkness,
our arms reaching out for each other,
our eyes reaching out for sweet light.

P.L.U.R.

© Copyright 2001 Lisa Marie - All Rights Reserved
angelbear
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since 2001-05-22
Posts 139
North East, USA
1 posted 2001-05-29 09:27 AM


Rage always is a terifying emotion, no matter the trigger. You sum this up quite well here. I like this poem a lot.  

I can't control
my destiny
I trust my soul,
my only goal
is just to "be"
-Lyrics from RENT

moshpit
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since 1999-11-25
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cebu, philippines
2 posted 2001-06-01 08:24 PM


The two of us, left alone in the darkness,
our arms reaching out for each other,

i love this line.. maybe because it conveys hope.. we all need hope.. and love..

nakdthoughts
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3 posted 2001-06-02 09:53 AM


this leaves me with many different thoughts..situations..not spelled out  but all felt deeply
~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II



Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
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Victoria Australia
4 posted 2001-06-03 09:37 AM


DJLI,
I too felt many things while reading this poem.
I liked the line about silent storms
and the one about arms reaching out, they provided a genuine contrast, and gave the edges of it a softness.
Write on
Kethry

Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life.  Patty Hansen.



LadyPeach1
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5 posted 2001-06-05 10:07 PM


This is a REALLY good poem!!!  Very good!


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6 posted 2001-06-06 01:57 PM


This was so full of emotion...wonderful   I really enjoyed it hun adn keep those poems comin!
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