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The Passing Shadow
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The Passing Shadow |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Within the full darkness that is the night, Lights of blue, Lights of red, And yellow, Flash! Beside the road and down steep embankment, Metal rent, Metal bent, And then spent, Crash! Along the side black bag in the headlight, Final play, Silent lay, Then away, Dead! Then flat-bedded away to impoundment, Then the rain, Came again, Washed off stain, Red! All is caught with eyes between the flashing, The mind collects pictures while still moving Past the crash of late last night’s partying, Unknowingly discounts the grim doing, Being just a shadow of night passing. Gloom |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
a senseless waste of life, especially with young people who never see the dangers of speeding. Really enjoyed the read, this one packs a punch, and I know this is not CRit so I hope you don't mind me adding this next comment. NO offence meant to you, I think the use of the word "crash" is not needed, you set up the subject matter well enough for people to grasp its meaning. Other than that, a well written piece. "across the unfair divide |
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BitterSmoke Member
since 2001-01-02
Posts 54 |
It is not often that we sense our own mortality. I dig. |
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a-alibaster Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 392 |
...and in thinking of our own mortality we some times fail to realize that death chooses no favorites... Thank you for the jolt of reality with my coffee... Until...ali "There is an alter ego which |
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poni Junior Member
since 2001-05-17
Posts 21Nebraska |
enjoyed the impact of this poem...a subject all too familiar this time of year...poni |
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