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ilph
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0 posted 2001-05-05 07:10 AM




she read like a fable
the words slipped from her skin
i scraped them off the floor
locked them within

the image dissolved on sight
her dust rode the breeze
burning the atmosphere bright
seizing the white clouds with a red dye
her feathered flakes longing to be lonely
scaring the sun from its homeless sky

i could only open myself for a bleeding
to extract her tale of pleading

"fray for me" she wrote
"pull yourself apart
float in fragments
lodge in my heart"

"pray for me" she prosed
"that twin fates divided
can somehow roam parallel
our pieces united"

everyday i sang her words to the setting sky

everyday

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coyote
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since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077

1 posted 2001-05-05 01:02 PM


A very interesting piece, Ilph.
I liked it a lot.  

"The rose, like the cactus flower, protects herself with thorns. We however, impale ourselves on their beauty."
coyote

Swamp¤Faeryie
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fairyland....of course;)
2 posted 2001-05-05 08:19 PM


"she read like a fable
the words slipped from her skin
i scraped them off the floor
locked them within"
WOW........this is an EXCELLENT excellent poem in my opinion...is all your poetry like this? WOW!! :! i am completely blown away,i love this.amazing,beautiful,wow....do you have a website,i think i'll look,bye  

swampsammi

much madness is divinest sense,and much sense the starkest madness~Emily Dickinson

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3 posted 2001-05-06 01:39 AM


your write is unique. I must read more of your work before providing you with any comments. Keep it up.

Ronil (One becomes god only when they have fully understood the role of being a human being.)

Severn
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4 posted 2001-05-06 09:55 AM


Very nice style, Ilph.

I particularly like the 1st verse..and the one beginning 'fray for me'

K

All obscurity starts with a danger:
Your dangers are many. I
Cannot look much but your form suffers
Some strange injury
Sylvia Plath

Tiersdin
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since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364
east coast
5 posted 2001-05-07 04:39 PM


Wow, I have no idea how I'd managed to miss this...

excellent writing...

~Tier

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