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Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2001-05-04 07:13 PM

In the mist
Of a forgotten morning,
Stands alone,
In sadness;
Wearing the black of mourning,
Looking out
Across seas,
Solitary on the sands,
Reaching out
With his heart,
Thoughts of her in unseen lands;
In the mist
Heart like a fist, he’s crying.

Gloom

amyX
Junior Member

since 2001-04-02

Posts 32

1 posted 2001-05-04 08:31 PM

"Wearing the black of mourning"

strong line
I like the visions of standing by
the sea with the grains of sand,
the grains of time, realizing
the disposition of existence.

thanks

Victims, aren't we all?

Isis
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-06

Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

2 posted 2001-05-04 09:14 PM

What a sad picture painted here for him. Followup - he cried an ocean of tears, then turned back towards the road, his life and his future...
Isis

*War produces one thing - Cemetaries. And in cemetaries there are no enemies!*
~Isis~~Sovereign of the Spirit.

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

3 posted 2001-05-04 10:02 PM

Grains of Time

In the reign
That cloaks me in present time
I am missed
By your words
Dressed in the blueness of rhyme
Holding, in
Grains of sand
Loving thoughts seeping between
Poetic lines
Heart in hand
Remember, my wearing green?
On that day
Deep blue eyes did lay upon mine.

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

ilph
Member

since 2000-07-28

Posts 78

4 posted 2001-05-05 07:13 AM

the professor of chills

this really is great.

i feel its coldness.

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

5 posted 2001-05-05 07:26 AM

Thank you, amyX,
I am pleased you liked this,
I believe that strong images make strong emotions,
Or at least enable strong emotions to be conveyed.

Thank you, Isis,
Although this is an old poem,
It is a recurring theme with in me,
But the idea of “then turned back towards the road, his life and his future...”
Tends to be more like my poem
“The Mourning Mist” which I will post as a follow up to this one.

Thank you, nakdthoughts,
For the wonderful poetic response in kind.

Thank you, ilph,
I am glad you got the feel.

Gloom

Suetang
Member Ascendant

since 2001-03-07

Posts 5187
Melbourne, Australia

6 posted 2001-05-05 06:43 PM

I thought this was a really haunting piece and I enjoyed reading it very much....Sue

Suetang

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

7 posted 2001-05-06 03:42 PM

A wonderful expression of the sadness we feel to be separated or lose someone we care for...James

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

8 posted 2001-05-06 06:53 PM

Thank you, Suetang,
Glad you enjoyed,
And I might be just a haunt myself,
If it were not for writing

Thank you, JamesMichael,
Seems that sadness is what I do best,
Pleased you liked it.

Gloom

Zinsser
Senior Member

since 2001-02-27

Posts 1641
Calif.

9 posted 2002-02-28 04:19 PM

Very beautiful..... sad piece...

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