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Blaec Member
since 2001-04-23
Posts 130The Sunshine State 
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I live my life in a dark room. No one else is around. There are no doors to be opened. No windows to be found. I run my hand along the padded walls, Looking for some escape. There is no way out. Now my life's at stake. I hear the faceless voices, Talking above my head. I fight to grasp what their saying, But I can not tell what's said. I'm losing all perspective. I've lost all control. Everything that I had, Is everything they stole. |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Good job, Blaec. "Insanity" is truly a relative term. You have definitely captured the jist if it.  "The rose, like the cactus flower, protects herself with thorns. We however, impale ourselves on their beauty." |
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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
Wow, you've got some spark in ya, your writing is great! Second one I've read and just as powerful and well penned as the first. I will be looking forward to reading much more of your work. With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free.. |
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Swamp¤Faeryie Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 393fairyland....of course;) |
ahhh insanity...my favorite subject,you've done excellent work here....i like the last lines,as a semi-insane (i'm not really insane i'm just eccentric to the point of rudeness) person myself i relate to these sentences,and may i take the opportunity to quote trent reznor "Head like a hole,black as your soul,i'd rather die that give you control"....insightful poem!! samantha¤ much madness is divinest sense,and much sense the starkest madness~Emily Dickinson |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Excellent description of insanity, Blaec, nice flow, very well written. -Tier |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Great poem. I liked the general tone of it. However, I think that the rhyming at the end of each sentence made the poem sound a bit awkward for this type of poetry. But that could be just my own style talking. Nevertheless, good poem here, Blaec. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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Dedreia Member
since 2000-07-10
Posts 172Kokomo, Indiana, United States |
I like it!!! I like it!! Very well written. Keep up the good work. Looking forward to the next one... Dee "It doesn't matter who you love, or how you love, but that you love" Rod McKuen |
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Blaec Member
since 2001-04-23
Posts 130The Sunshine State |
Thanks to you all! |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i liked this... you explained it so well ..keep wriiting  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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