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420timebong
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since 2001-04-24

Posts 3
Canada

0 posted 2001-04-25 12:10 PM

hiding in A Dark Room

You open doors,
and i close them.
Once in awhile i peek my head out to see if your still there.

Inside my room is dark.
I sit there alone and feel i need noone, no love.
I never needed it before. So Can i leave you today?
No, i never want to. but i let you think otherwise almost everyday.
How should i show my love to you? i have not a clue. i just give up,
and go back to feeling blue.

I close more doors than i open, but i hope you will stay. because i
never leave the door closed forever. One day i will let the door open,
and together we can play. and my loneliness will forever go away..

(this is my first poem since i just got into poetry.)

''The words you say never seem to live up to the ones inside your head.'' Chris Cornell

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

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Hurricane Alley

1 posted 2001-04-25 01:57 AM

Welcome to the family. I enjoyed this, your first poem! Feel free to read and reply...ask questions if you want. We're here to help. Please check your email!

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

2 posted 2001-04-26 01:55 AM

Welcome to our online home...

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Xeonox

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since 2000-04-01

Posts 1764
CA, USA

3 posted 2001-04-27 01:42 AM

To me it seems that the speaker seems afariad of being ina a realtionship and wants the other person to be patience. IF I am reading wrong, forgive me and Welcome to Passions.

Ronil (One becomes god only when they have fully understood the role of being a human being.)

EagleOne
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since 2000-03-07

Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...

4 posted 2001-04-27 08:02 AM

I'd like to add my welcome also!

"Friends are quiet angels who lift us to our
feet when our wings have trouble remembering how to fly." ~unknown

OLIAS
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since 2000-06-20

Posts 1090
Pearl city Iowa

5 posted 2001-04-27 03:26 PM

Welcome to passions and I enjoyed your first offering very much, written with much depth of emotion I hope to read more.

Regards
Olias.

Ginners
Member

since 2000-07-22

Posts 339
Mullica Hill, New Jersey

6 posted 2001-04-27 09:53 PM

This was very good for your first poem. welcome to passions i am looking forward to reading more.

"I'll build a wall if we can keep them on the other side"---NIN
"There is no always forever, just this"-the cure

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