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coma_dream
New Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 6


0 posted 2001-04-24 06:40 PM


Fictional

Peace and releaf, as you fall down
Keep getting deeper, fail to make a sound
Try to realise, it’s just another dream
We’re only fictional, you and me

I guess you’re just, longing for pain
As fake as it will be, you live another day
Try to float, you see it’s another dream
You’re only fictional, you’ll see

I’m too buy (aren’t we just perfect ?)
I’m too buy (as perfect as we can be)
I’m too buy (aren’t we too perfect ?)
I am only fictional (if you just could see...)

Take this shape, to fit in what you are
You spread through my body, getting too far
Try to breathe, you try to escape the dream
I suffocate you, the fiction is not what it seems

I’m too buy (aren’t we just perfect ?)
I’m too buy (as perfect as we can be)
I’m too buy (aren’t we too perfect ?)
I am only fictional (if you just could see...)

I’m too buy (I’d wish we were perfect)
I’m too buy (as perfect as we can be)
I’m too buy (we can never be too perfect)
I am only fictional (if we just could see...)

That I’m dying...



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Dedreia
Member
since 2000-07-10
Posts 172
Kokomo, Indiana, United States
1 posted 2001-04-24 08:37 PM


Great first post!!  Welcome to this wonderful place...I have been away for a while, but it feels good to be home.  Thanks for your nice words about my poem as well.  Looking forward to the next one!
Dee  

"It doesn't matter who you love, or how you love, but that you love" Rod McKuen

Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley
2 posted 2001-04-25 01:54 AM


Welcome to the family! I think you'll find we are very friendly. I look forward to reading more from you. Please check your email!  
Severn
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since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

3 posted 2001-04-26 01:53 AM


Welcome to Passions...

hope you find this a wonderful place to be...

K

Xeonox
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Senior Member
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764
CA, USA
4 posted 2001-04-27 01:43 AM


I enjoyed this post. It is a new style of writing that I have seen. Great work.  

Ronil (One becomes god only when they have fully understood the role of being a human being.)

EagleOne
Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...
5 posted 2001-04-27 07:35 AM


"Take this shape, to fit in what you are
You spread through my body, getting too far
Try to breathe, you try to escape the dream
I suffocate you, the fiction is not what it seems"

Welcome! I too liked the style of this one. I enjoyed the read, take care!

"Friends are quiet angels who lift us to our
feet when our wings have trouble remembering how to fly." ~unknown


OLIAS
Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090
Pearl city Iowa
6 posted 2001-04-27 03:30 PM


I like this very much, a refreshing style, welcome  to passions and thank you for sharing this.

Regards,
Olias.

Ginners
Member
since 2000-07-22
Posts 339
Mullica Hill, New Jersey
7 posted 2001-04-27 09:58 PM


This was a great write, welcome to passions.  

"I'll build a wall if we can keep them on the other side"---NIN
"There is no always forever, just this"-the cure

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