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Kicking Kim
Member

since 2001-04-16

Posts 426
Cloud Cucko Land!

0 posted 2001-04-17 09:52 AM

I feel very embarassed,
owing to my translucent genes.
Higher levels of worries,
with different scenes.
I didn't ask,
I didn't need
to be here.

Profound thoughts hiding;
scared to come out.
Fade into the background,
and hide there throughout.
If just one would become brave
enough to shine through,
maybe just maybe it would break the cycle.
But I doubt it.

Dust and dirt approaching the discarded pile,
trying to find a way,
out of this hidden file.
Nobody asked,
nobody needed
to be there.

The end is near,
it fits the file like a glove.
Time has come to take me,
to a higher level above.
I asked,
I needed,
to be
Here.

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

1 posted 2001-04-17 01:57 PM

nice poem.
i enjoyed this one.
keep writing

Isis
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-06

Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

2 posted 2001-04-17 07:23 PM

A sad emotional post, I belive no one should hide in the shadows. We ALL have something that makes us shine, and we should come out and share it with the world. Do our bit to make the world a better place by sharing our gift with the world..
Too heavy? Sorry..

Isis

*War produces one thing - Cemetaries. And in cemetaries there are no enemies!*
~Isis~~Sovereign of the Spirit.

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

3 posted 2001-04-18 12:01 PM

Very nicely done! I enjoyed the read!

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

Lethe
Junior Member

since 2001-04-10

Posts 36
Blackforrest

4 posted 2001-04-18 04:10 PM

Dust and dirt approaching the discarded pile,
trying to find a way,
out of this hidden file.
Nobody asked,
nobody needed
to be there.
*************
I must embrace this stanza, as egregious next to the others.

And to your comment on Advent, I feel you caught the main point in those lines. I like being asked questions about my poetry, so keep on asking, but more importantly -keep on writing.

Lethe

Heavens Tears

Senior Member

since 2001-03-15

Posts 677

5 posted 2001-04-18 05:32 PM

I really liked this poem. It had a strong message. Keep writing.

*If the only place I can live my dreams is in my sleep, then I'll sleep forever!*

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

6 posted 2001-04-19 01:38 AM

This was simply amazing Kim. You have come into our forums and stuck out from the rest. You are such a wonderful person to have in here. Your poems and replies are appreciated.
I enjoyed this poem greatly!
I hope to read more!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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