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amyX
Junior Member
since 2001-04-02
Posts 32


0 posted 2001-04-16 09:33 PM


disciple dipped in sacchrine
ten less than twenty days ago
turning the wheels of condition

in flattery bashed brushing eyes
will you, will you fix my will
for a new disposition?

just whispering breezes
and breathing symptoms
a delicate lack of dedication

disciplined dramatic screams

counting out of turn
two four six eight
eleven less than
yesterday

*

cool chicas
babysoft buns
and bathroom grafitti

hang on, little flavor
ease back before you go
take a swalow
of you ego-driven ability

buddy binges
pretty purges
and mechanical therapy

hang on, little disorder
ease below average lies
take a swallow
of your hopitalized agility

*

all the other girls
twice as nice as thin
brought about a methodical cure

sing for me, sister
let your hands fall frail
just raise my head above the water
and let the whispers drown

all the other girls
twice as nice as thin
brought without a medicinal cure

sing for me, sister
let your ideals fall frail
just look myself in reflection
and starve the whispers dry

*

i'm not
i'm not
i'm just little
i'm just framed
in a small package
without hips
without breast implants
without nutrition

i'm not
i'm not
i'm just timid
i'm just strong
in a weak package
without thighs
without limited space
without dedication

i'm not
i'm not
i'm just hungry
i'm just ugly
in a pretty package
without life
without painful ease
without starvation

without starvation
i'm not anything

*

Victims, aren't we all?

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Swamp¤Faeryie
Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 393
fairyland....of course;)
1 posted 2001-04-16 10:05 PM


wow,this was incredible,i dig this style,you've made it very tense,you've made it something ugly wrapped in pretty papers and tied with pretty strings,very well done.

sammi

much madness is divinest sense,and much sense the starkest madness~Emily Dickinson

Kicking Kim
Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426
Cloud Cucko Land!
2 posted 2001-04-17 04:37 PM


"disciplined dramatic screams" I like this line because it stands out from the other stanzas and is set aside - I'm guessing for a reason of significance! This is a brilliant poem and I enjoyed it very much.  Keep up the good work

^*~Kicking Kim~*^

"Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression"

coyote
Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077

3 posted 2001-04-17 06:01 PM


A real "eye-opener", Amy.
Very positive and powerful expressions of otherwise negative energy. You have channeled it very creatively.
Another fine work.
Thanks.  

"I hate quotes, they suck!"
I.G. Norance

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