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Lethe
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since 2001-04-10
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Blackforrest

0 posted 2001-04-14 10:55 AM



ADVENT

It was all true
A parlour strode, and the night sets forever
I stray in the quiet cold
And you gird me when I dare to listen

Elastic meadow, endless arms of sorrow
Lips try to form "because"
Trying to adapt to the wilderness
Where even foes close their eyes and leave

We are inside the glade
Every now and then I wipe the dust aside
To remember...

How I drape my face with my bare hands
The same that brought me here
But you were beyond all help
The folded message that wept my name

Shadows skulk at my coming
We survey the slopes
In search for the words to write the missing page
The tainted dogma

Time grows short
As the piper plays his time
We are almost there

You are beyond all help
Dancing into the void
We are almost there



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Swamp¤Faeryie
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since 2000-12-04
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fairyland....of course;)
1 posted 2001-04-14 02:37 PM


"Elastic meadow, endless arms of sorrow
Lips try to form "because"
Trying to adapt to the wilderness
Where even foes close their eyes and leave
"
Wowie,i love that stanza esp. this is so great,has any of your work been published?
Great job!!

samantha¤

much madness is divinest sense,and much sense the starkest madness~Emily Dickinson

Tiersdin
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since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364
east coast
2 posted 2001-04-14 11:39 PM


Excellent, as all the writings that have preceded this one.

*smiles*

-Tier

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3 posted 2001-04-17 02:04 AM


Fantastice piece you have here!  I enjoyed the read, and look forward to the rest in the series.  Thanks for sharing  

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

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4 posted 2001-04-17 02:09 AM


great poem! it was a nicely written piece
keep writing

Kicking Kim
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5 posted 2001-04-17 04:01 PM


"Elastic meadow, endless arms of sorrow" I love this line because the elasticity shows how the meadow goes on and on as well as showing the lengh of the arms of sorrow!  Was this meamt to be? Plz let me know by replying to 1 of my poems, emailing me or visiting my website and leaving a message on the "Have your say" icon!

Truly appreciative
^*~Kicking Kim~*^

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