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coyote
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since 2001-03-17
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0 posted 2001-04-12 08:12 PM


"sixties"


I speak in tongues apart
of martyrdom and sacrifice
when soup cans were art
and cigarettes were underpriced

peace hung around one's neck
an albatross of disrespect
when communal love was "free"
to take, or make, or "let it be"

cut wisdom teeth on teenage angst
and count your losses on the news
when "bingo" was a game of ranks
that numbered names to win or lose

"where have all the flowers gone"
what happened to them in the song
coming home they don't belong
to honor, duty, right or wrong

mad monk, prophet priests
holy hippie heretic beliefs
jaded judas beggar thief
broken bottled ghostly grief
in the sewered city street
these are surely your forgotten

youth writhing in your "wonder years"
from insufficient breast fed fears
crying gothic griefless tears
darkness drives but no one steers
allegiance always to your peers
tattoos piercing deafened ears
believing only your begotten

though the sixties fathered social change
the "generation gap" remains
rebellious spirit reigns
in ever new directions

closed captioned in a single frame
we have no one else to blame
for our future's acute pain
drains from chronic dire infections

[This message has been edited by coyote (edited 04-14-2001).]

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Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
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1 posted 2001-04-13 12:27 PM


coyote
a reminisce, I'm glad I didn't miss this
write on
Kethry

Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life.  Patty Hansen.



Krawdad
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2 posted 2001-04-13 01:50 AM


Oh ya, the forgotten "sixties".  Guess I've forgotten them on purpose, mostly.  Maybe I ought to dig into that . . . hmmmmm.
Well, thanks, I think, Coyote.

/:-}==
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coyote
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3 posted 2001-04-13 09:50 AM


Thanks, Kethry and Krawdad.
I'm always workin' on these pieces.
I changed a few lines.  

"I hate quotes, they suck!"
I.G. Norance

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4 posted 2001-04-13 01:07 PM


Well...I'm kind of going back myself lately. I'm hearing music from the 60s and 70s. It's amazing. I enjoyed this poem a lot. I felt it completely even though I was born in the 80s. Great job on this one coyote.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

coyote
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5 posted 2001-04-13 02:49 PM


Thanks, Javier.
I changed the ending a little since you read it. See what you think?  

"I hate quotes, they suck!"
I.G. Norance

Krawdad
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6 posted 2001-04-13 06:16 PM


Maybe the next time you could call it "Opus 2" and submit it again.  This seems like a different poem now, but the original is gone.  Would have been more fun to compare the two.  Hmmm.  Gives me an idea . . . submitting multiple forms of the "same" poem.  Problem is, my versions get all scribbled together and it's a mess.  Oh well . . .
Kraw'

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/:-}==
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coyote
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7 posted 2001-04-13 07:43 PM


Glad ya noticed, Kraw.    
Like I told ya, "It's a work in progress."
Nobody ever said it was done.
Maybe it ain't yet? lol
If I "dare to compare"  
Perhaps "A Starry Night"
began as "A Field of Sunflowers"?
And I might of asked Van Gough, "Whydya cut yer ear off man?" lol
Thanks, Krawdad.    


"I hate quotes, they suck!"
I.G. Norance


[This message has been edited by coyote (edited 04-13-2001).]

Swamp¤Faeryie
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8 posted 2001-04-13 11:32 PM


hmmm i quite like this!! You've done a great job at writing this,this must go to the library,wonderful work!!

sam

much madness is divinest sense,and much sense the starkest madness~Emily Dickinson

coyote
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9 posted 2001-04-13 11:50 PM


Thanks again, Swamp.
I think I'll leave it as is for a while. lol
Especially if you like it.  

amyX
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since 2001-04-02
Posts 32

10 posted 2001-04-15 11:23 AM


coyote, this is full of trippy images
and i enjoyed experiencing every one of
them

(i'm not too keen on words lately)

very cool

Victims, aren't we all?

coyote
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11 posted 2001-04-15 11:30 AM


Why thank you, Amy.
"Trippy" is an appropriate word I think? lol
And you are very keen on words.  

"I hate quotes, they suck!"
I.G. Norance

Severn
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12 posted 2001-04-15 08:29 PM


Fantastic Billy...just fantastic...love it...

keep 'em coming...


K

All obscurity starts with a danger:
Your dangers are many. I
Cannot look much but your form suffers
Some strange injury
Sylvia Plath

coyote
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13 posted 2001-04-15 10:17 PM


Thanks, Kamla.
I appreciate your opinion very much.

"I hate quotes, they suck!"
I.G. Norance

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14 posted 2001-04-19 08:21 PM


This is a very interesting one.. I like it a lot.  Enjoyed, as always.

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

coyote
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15 posted 2001-04-19 10:15 PM


Thank you, Marie.  
"Another little piece o' my heart."

"I hate quotes, they suck!"
I.G. Norance

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