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coyote
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0 posted 2001-04-08 11:39 PM


"Cry, "Havoc!" and let slip the dogs of war."
[Shakespeare, Julius Caesar, III,i]

overture.......

refugees along the road
babies bear a heavy load
dead or dying tales are told
to this fragile human fold
as mental mines explode
in the arms of sorrow


perfume rivers running mud
holy bridges dripping blood
monks or nuns are under hood
praying for a greater good
cryptic verses understood
Lord, who are we to follow?


rockets rip in flashing flight
tracers strip across the night
crippled cries in echoed fright
pleading for salvation's light
nightmares into daylight dream
dying through the living scream
righteousness, what does it mean?
human sacrifice it seems
cannot rush tomorrow

requiem.......

Surviving for our sins
the dreaded work begins
raindrops entwining limbs
in serpentine conformity

awaiting body bags and tags
mothers holding folded flags
honor guards in rags
load a seething hemorrhage
of deformity


as distant crescendos grow
to a crying sky's refrain
lonely soaking soldiers know
tears of war fall to earth
as rain


epilogue.......

through the rain trudge ordained warriors  
plastic profaned phantoms of the fog
fire and ice have tempered honor's sword
and leashed once more a rabid "devil dog"



"I hate quotes, they suck!"
I.G. Norance

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Swamp¤Faeryie
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1 posted 2001-04-09 12:42 PM


very cool. It reminds me of Cantebury tales meets Baudelaire and dante's inferno...lol...i don't know why,but i love it anyhow. Esp. the last stanza.

sammi

much madness is divinest sense,and much sense the starkest madness~Emily Dickinson

coyote
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2 posted 2001-04-09 12:55 PM


Thanks, Sammi.  
You picked a strange trio there, and I like all of those works. lol
But then war is a strange thing, too.  

"I hate quotes, they suck!"
I.G. Norance

mirror man
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3 posted 2001-04-09 02:19 AM


Hello, Coyote.  I agree.  This is excellent.  
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4 posted 2001-04-09 04:21 AM


Amazing. You took me on a trip into your mind with this write. Very well done. I enjoyed this a great deal. One my my favs. I liked the scheme and style of it all....quite good!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Severn
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5 posted 2001-04-09 09:31 AM


Wow - this is great...

it's quite a writer you are  

K

All obscurity starts with a danger:
Your dangers are many. I
Cannot look much but your form suffers
Some strange injury
Sylvia Plath

coyote
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6 posted 2001-04-09 06:44 PM


Thanks for the compliment, Mirror Man.
I like your work very much too.  

Javier, I'm glad you could see the images. Thanks, so much for reading and commenting.

Kamla, You are the sophisticated writer, I'm just a "poetic psycho". lol  

"I hate quotes, they suck!"
I.G. Norance

Isis
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7 posted 2001-04-10 07:01 PM


Exactly!!  Could NOT have said it better!  
Makes me think and worry about this China/American thing going on at present *sigh*.  
We know, we have learned, but when will the war machines learn??
Isis

*War produces one thing - Cemetaries. And in cemetaries there are no enemies!*
~Isis~~Sovereign of the Spirit.



coyote
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8 posted 2001-04-10 07:06 PM


Thank you, Isis.
I'm glad you liked it.

"I hate quotes, they suck!"
I.G. Norance

amyX
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9 posted 2001-04-11 10:31 PM


I read this piece and felt very
"un-patriotic"
maybe as if it was rebel yell

very cool coyote

i like the form as well
(i'm not to keen on doin' it myself
and i just barely learned the rules to
a haiku - but, alas, i recognize!)

coyote
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10 posted 2001-04-11 11:31 PM


Amy,

Thanks again, for reading.  

"I hate quotes, they suck!"
I.G. Norance

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11 posted 2001-04-17 01:58 AM


*applauds*

The style and format of this poem is awesome!  I really like the story... very neat.  Thanks for sharing this!  It's very nicely done  

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

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12 posted 2001-04-17 02:20 AM


amazing poem. i really enojed this one.great job. keep writing
coyote
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13 posted 2001-04-17 08:51 AM


Thanks, Marie & Albert.
I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment.  

"I hate quotes, they suck!"
I.G. Norance

baerlon
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14 posted 2001-04-20 03:20 AM


This is a excellent peice, i hope to read more like it.

There's a peace inside us all
Let it be your friend
It will help you carry on
In the end
There's a peace inside us all
-Creed

coyote
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15 posted 2001-04-20 07:04 PM


Thank you, Sir Baerlon.
It's good to get the Britt perspective.
I appreciate you reading and commenting.  


"I know that I am like the rain. There but for the grace of you go I."
Paul Simon-Kathy's Song

[This message has been edited by coyote (edited 04-20-2001).]

Godsend_1
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16 posted 2001-04-21 03:52 AM


ok wow is all i can say i loved it it like took me through wut you saw and felt and i loved it thank you for a great read later man
coyote
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17 posted 2001-04-21 12:05 PM


Thanks, Godsend_1.
Appreciate you reading.
Glad ya liked it.  

"I know that I am like the rain. There but for the grace of you go I."
Paul Simon-Kathy's Song

kodak
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18 posted 2001-04-22 05:22 PM


fantastic! Love your style: short verses full of strong images with a hint of the biblical. I especially liked the third verse.
You remind me a little of William Blake. Have you ever read him?

coyote
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19 posted 2001-04-22 06:26 PM


Thanks, Kodak.
I've read a little of Blake's work.  

"The rose, like the cactus flower, protects herself with thorns. We however, impale ourselves on their beauty."
coyote

Kethry
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20 posted 2001-04-23 12:32 PM


Well psycho poet, you've captured the moment mad as it is.
War is madness
unleashed sadness.
Loved the metre and rhyming scheme.
write on
Kethry

Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life.  Patty Hansen.



coyote
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21 posted 2001-04-23 09:00 AM


Thanks so much for reading, Kethry.
Your comments are most appreciated.  

"The rose, like the cactus flower, protects herself with thorns. We however, impale ourselves on their beauty."
coyote

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22 posted 2001-04-23 04:49 PM


awesome..job
i really liked it
the way u written it the way...u knoe..?
nicely done
keep writing

...?

death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins

coyote
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23 posted 2001-04-23 09:12 PM


Thanks Anonymous Albert ?
For stopping by to read.  

"The rose, like the cactus flower, protects herself with thorns. We however, impale ourselves on their beauty."
coyote

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