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just_another_fe
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since 2000-02-05
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0 posted 2001-04-05 12:14 PM


"hold on to him he's a great guy and girls will try to get at him"

I'd love to hold on to him with all my heart,
never let him go, never be apart.
He's the greatest guy and he means the world to me.
Perfect, that's how a life with him would be.
But I can't hold on, I haven't the right.
Other girls can have him and I can't even fight.
he's not mine and never will be
cuz no matter how much I love him, he'll never love me

© Copyright 2001 Angie - All Rights Reserved
coyote
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since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077

1 posted 2001-04-05 01:01 AM


Not stupid at all, really.
I wrote a piece with these same feelings called "time after time".
Sad thoughts, but true sometimes.
Another truth is that life goes on.
Time will fix it.
Good job, Thanks.  

"I hate quotes, they suck!"
I.G. Norance

Severn
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since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

2 posted 2001-04-05 06:22 AM


Awwwwwwwww...



sad....

I agree with Coyote though - life does go on...really it does!

K

All obscurity starts with a danger:
Your dangers are many. I
Cannot look much but your form suffers
Some strange injury
Sylvia Plath

Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
3 posted 2001-04-05 06:03 PM


excellent poem, with wise words.
Well done!
Kethry

Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life.  Patty Hansen.



amyX
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since 2001-04-02
Posts 32

4 posted 2001-04-06 10:54 PM


girls and boys
just a little game the world played


eventually, you can look back on all the guys you ever loved and laugh
really really loud

nice flow of the truth

Victims, aren't we all?

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5 posted 2001-04-07 12:58 PM


A good message.  You did a nice job on portraying reality.  Very well written... Keep posting.

--Marie

It's true that we don't know what we've got until we lose it, but it's also true that we don't know what we've been missing until it arrives.

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6 posted 2001-04-07 01:43 PM


Very sad......but there's always hope.
Anyhow I liked this and I hope good things fly your way.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

qtpieelmo
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since 2000-07-04
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7 posted 2001-04-08 04:04 PM


Awe this is a cute poem & I've been down that road many times B4   LOVE ELMO <3
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