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a-alibaster
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since 2000-01-08

Posts 392

0 posted 2001-04-02 11:46 AM

…and if sorrow knocked on my door
would I let her in?
But of course I would
And I would be comforted with every sin.
…and if time stood still
would I place your soul up the sill?
But of course I would
And I would watch it choke until I had my fill.
…and if pain touched me
would I embrace it with cold skin?
But of course I would
And I would rock it gently until it wept and begin again.
…and if death held out his hand
would I dance?
But of course I would
And I would curtsy low at such a wondrous chance.

"There is an alter ego which
dwells in every soul..."
a-alibaster

"I am as I am, nothing more, nothing less,
I am tears of pain, tears of Death.

Swamp¤Faeryie
Member

since 2000-12-04

Posts 393
fairyland....of course;)

1 posted 2001-04-02 01:52 PM

mmmm,this was kind of sassy tongue in cheek dark poetry,i love that style it particularly thrilling.ha. Loved this poem,esp the last three or four lines,lovely lovely!!

sammi¤

much madness is divinest sense,and much sense the starkest madness~Emily Dickinson

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

2 posted 2001-04-02 04:30 PM

This was great! I loved it. The style is perfect. Nicely done.

--Marie

It's true that we don't know what we've got until we lose it, but it's also true that we don't know what we've been missing until it arrives.

dragonpoe
Senior Member

since 2000-11-12

Posts 608
Palm Bay, Florida

3 posted 2001-04-03 03:51 PM

Of course I loved it. Has that "I am my own woman" feel to it. Nice work.

With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free..
dragonpoe

Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

4 posted 2001-04-03 07:11 PM

Sounds angry, my friend. I do like it though. It fits well with my conflicting moods. Weird to feel gentle and angry at the same time isn't it? Your work gets better and better.

still d-i-s-c-o-n-n-e-c-t-e-d
I am bound by this, you see...to become Night's sole mistress, and I am jealous in my endeavours for his attention.

a-alibaster
Member

since 2000-01-08

Posts 392

5 posted 2001-04-04 08:11 AM

I thank you all for your kind words, means more to me than I could ever tell you.
Until...ali

"There is an alter ego which
dwells in every soul..."
a-alibaster

"I am as I am, nothing more, nothing less,
I am tears of pain, tears of Death.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

6 posted 2001-04-05 05:42 PM

I llke this...James

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

7 posted 2001-04-05 06:01 PM

Is this poem knife edged in irony...but of course. Can I relate to it...but of course. Did it make my morning brighter...indeed it did. good poem.
Write on
Kethry

Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.

Broken
Member

since 2000-03-12

Posts 271
The woods

8 posted 2001-04-07 09:05 PM

Nice inner monologue.
I liked it very much.

~Broken~

Base not your joy upon the deeds of others, for what is given can be taken away. -Peter Steele

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