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JamesMichael
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0 posted 2001-04-01 07:16 PM


The Pain Game

Do I wish my life wasn't so sad?
Hell yes, but it's not always 24/7 bad.
Does sadness cause you any pain?
Hell yes, every time it calls out my name.
"Come her boy.  I've got another surprise for you.  
Some more pain for you to do."
And you know they say no pain no gain.
That's the only way to play the pain game.
So don't even think about taking it away.
Does pain get your undivided attention?
Hell yes, I realize I'm doing something wrong
everytime it visits.
Not sure if it's inattention or what the hell is it.
Is there a necessary way to respond to pain?
Hell yes, I respond appropriately by crying.
Does crying help to ease the pain?
Hell yes, especially if I cry in the rain.
Is it raining right now?
Hell yes it's raining cats and dogs.
Do you feel better?
Hell yes.

Jameslee@April01,2001


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JamesMichael
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1 posted 2001-04-03 10:06 AM


Nobody likes this poem as much as I do...hell no...James
Panne447
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2 posted 2001-04-03 04:20 PM


James, Your title brought me in and I stayed because I LIKED this whole big bunches! I won't even attempt to critique this - it seems so right as it is. Been there, done that, have a closet full of the T-shirts.  Also reminded me of a piece I wrote years ago.  Panne
Panne447
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3 posted 2001-04-03 04:28 PM


James- I know - from the opening line there was the question and the itty bitty tinge of hope that sits in the back of children or the child within each of us while still facing the facts of his/her daily life. To me, this was a piece about child abuse/ spousal abuse/animal abuse - any and all abuse. Loved the line - got more pain for you to do - perfect description. The whining/complaining/pitying that we all do BUT with that twinge of hopefulness and that feeling of 'it must be me' and all that this piece entail. Yep. I like it more with each read. Panne
JamesMichael
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4 posted 2001-04-05 03:44 AM


Panne this is actually about a woman abusing her boyfriend.....ha..ha..
Seriousely it is one in a series in which I express my frustration to have a woman that I adore tell me she loved me and then run away from me...proving to me that I have failed once again to successfully find love...I have totally lost my hope for this relationship...a woman that cared for me would chase me and leave no doubts in my mind about her feelings, desires and  intentions...James

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