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Tobias
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since 2001-03-22
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USA

0 posted 2001-03-26 12:05 PM


Truth

You can give me your mind,
and your body if you choose,
but spare us the pain
of my eventual failure
and leave your heart at home.

3/26/2001
Tobias

© Copyright 2001 Tobias - All Rights Reserved
Just A Woman
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since 2001-03-10
Posts 507

1 posted 2001-03-26 12:49 PM


Ouch. I compliment your ability to write so powerfully with so few words. Welcome!

"Often the test of courage is not to die but to live"

~Vittorio Alferi~

Dark Angel
Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095

2 posted 2001-03-26 05:16 PM


Phew! Powerful stuff indeed, straight to the point.
so much said in only few words

Well Done, I enjoyed.

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Maree

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since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131
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3 posted 2001-03-26 08:26 PM


WELCOME

Great first post. I think you could probably add more to it, but nicely done just the same.

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

Temptress*Moon
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since 2001-01-15
Posts 240
Long Island, NY
4 posted 2001-03-26 11:14 PM


Excellent First post*S*
Welcome Welcome to DP*S*
Temptress*Moon


I slept and dreamed that life was beauty was thy dream then a shadowy lie? -ESH-

EagleOne
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since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...
5 posted 2001-03-28 03:03 AM


Powerful, emotive, and honest, excellent!

"I've done all the dumb things"....Paul Kelly

Dawn Eclipse
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since 2000-01-31
Posts 637
The Horsehead Nebula
6 posted 2001-03-28 04:52 PM


Powerful words.  Nicely written, welcome!

"Forget regret, or life is yours to miss. No other course, no other way... No day but today"
~Broadway Musical RENT~

*Cassandra Roseen*


Severn
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

7 posted 2001-03-29 07:21 PM


Welcome!

Loving this piece - short and sharp...

K

Kethry
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
8 posted 2001-03-30 05:23 PM


Wow! power packed! Welcome.
Kethry

Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.



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