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AWood0813
Junior Member

since 2001-02-23

Posts 21

0 posted 2001-03-23 03:09 AM

The five senses determine all:

To see her: Walking arms wide open
To hear her: Laughter in your ears
To smell her: Shampoo when she flings her hair
To feel her: As her hand slids into yours
To taste her: Kiss before she's given it

To see her: Dirty brown eyes looking into yours
To hear her: Quietly whisper "Hold me" in the dead of night
To smell her: Body as she slowly settles next to you
To feel her: Silkky smooth body by yours
To taste her: Soft sweet kiss given freely

To see her: Walking away back turned
To hear her: Voice in your dreams
To smell her: Even when she's not around
To feel her: Hand slip away, finger by finger
To taste her: Once and never again

To Know Her
To Want Her
To Lose Her

Awood0813 "Sad and confused"

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

1 posted 2001-03-23 03:14 AM

Sometimes we have to let go of someone to assure their happiness and also ours...if they don't want to be with us they will make our lives miserable...they will be unhappy and we will be unhappy...James

Jellybean King
Member

since 2001-03-07

Posts 153
Jelly, Bean

2 posted 2001-03-23 04:19 PM

I love how the first two stanzas describe the 5 senses in material concrete ways...giving rise to an implied 6th sense in the last two...hearing (in dreams)...tasting (she's not there). I think that is how it goes between lovers...that's why it's so hard to let go. Thanks for sharing this enjoyable read!

Jellybean King

Angelwings
Member

since 1999-08-27

Posts 222
IL, USA

3 posted 2001-03-24 02:24 AM

Wood~
Coming from a friend whose been in your shoes for quite a long time now. Although this poem is awesome and a wonderful way to describe the feeling of a loved one. Unless you want to drive yourself insane you need to separate yourself from her. It sucks to see you hurting so bad. Don't let her steal your fire Aaron. Don't do it.
Signed~your friend Concerned

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

4 posted 2001-03-25 04:30 AM

This was a very sensual write, in every sense of the word. And the ending heatbreak was visible and real. *HuGS*
Write on
Kethry

Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.

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