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K2001
Junior Member
since 2001-01-19
Posts 31
Near manchester in England

0 posted 2001-03-20 03:29 AM


Deep dark red takes over my mind,
as i search for a childhood i'll never find.
Sweating, shaking, memories of a tortured past.
Stolen moments, must wake up fast.
Its a burden, aching my shoulders, drowning quickly now.
Chains around my ankles, must escape it somehow.
Im lost. Alone, in this big black hole,
where once there lay a childs pure soul.
With rain in my eyes and a storm in my heart,
he held me down fiercely, legs ripped apart.
Soft childlike sobs of such fear and pain,
as he forces his fatherhood, again and again.
Endless pits lye within these eyes,
shame hides inside his lies.
Scars cover my mind, there to stay,
My secret childhood locked away.

"Keep the faith"-Jon Bon Jovi

© Copyright 2001 K.J.Hilton - All Rights Reserved
Swamp¤Faeryie
Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 393
fairyland....of course;)
1 posted 2001-03-21 12:51 PM


This was terrible,but i think that's the way it should be. Why disguise the facts,right? It was a well written peice,very disturbing and blunt,like a tori amos song. My childhood purity was quickly destroyed also,and it's terrible what that does to the rest of your life,write on!!!!!

sammi¤

much madness is divinest sense,and much sense the starkest madness~Emily Dickinson

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
2 posted 2001-03-21 04:42 AM


Very well written...James
Kethry
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
3 posted 2001-03-22 04:05 PM


K2001,
blunt and forceful, and yes well written. *HuGS*
Kethry

Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.



Lady Bere
Member
since 2000-02-03
Posts 73
Valmeyer, Illinois USA
4 posted 2001-03-23 12:15 PM


I agree with those before me. Very well written.
cobie
New Member
since 2000-11-28
Posts 4
netherlands
5 posted 2001-03-23 06:38 PM


very will written, as iff you described my childhood, it hurts and I hope you'll be able to come over it and live your life as it should be
take care, you really are not alone,
coby

Suetang
Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187
Melbourne, Australia
6 posted 2001-07-09 06:58 PM


The first poem I read affected me but I'm lost for words with this one, so haunting were your words and so very tragic.  Take care.....Sue

Suetang

illusion
Member
since 2001-06-19
Posts 296

7 posted 2001-07-10 11:58 AM


Very powerful and painful - you've written horror well.
qtpieelmo
Senior Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 989
Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY
8 posted 2001-07-10 08:10 PM


This is great--i can tottally relate, i've been there too--I'm here if u ever need to talk--~HUGZ~ LOVE ELMO <3

[This message has been edited by qtpieelmo (edited 07-10-2001).]

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