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0 posted 2001-03-13 04:53 PM



By the stroke of a pen,
God created men,

He left no room for change,
For he was certain of humans range,

Evil and greed decide to show,
Transforming Gods design in a perfect foe.


Ronil (The sweet sound of summer sends serenity through my soul searching for that evermore solitude.)



© Copyright 2001 Ronil B Tataria - All Rights Reserved
just_another_fe
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1 posted 2001-03-13 10:43 PM


wow i liked that i cant explain why really but for some reason it was very interesting to me, maybe its uniqueness and its truth
taramw
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2 posted 2001-03-15 04:27 AM


I liked... terrific

may you live all the days of your life. -- jonathan swift

Jeremiah Johnson
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3 posted 2001-03-15 03:02 PM


this is a wonderful poem you have a true gift like I do. i think we should start emailing each others about views and such. but back to the poem it's perfect, states the truth out right. yet i am not greedy, and i am a rather nice person. just looking for the love of my life but i have a hard time getting people to understand me.
keep writing.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


G. A. Webb
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4 posted 2001-03-15 06:49 PM


To my fellow Orange County poet, this was great! It just goes to show that it dosen't have to have allot of words to get it's point across. And that it did, very well. Thanks for sharing and keep it up!

See ya!

G

Regret not that which you have done,
Rather that which you haven't


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