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Temptress*Moon
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since 2001-01-15
Posts 240
Long Island, NY

0 posted 2001-03-08 11:10 PM




Alone i sit and cry
My tears going unnoticed
Shutting out life
Surrendering to my demons
Scared and confused
Why am i this way?
The person i grew up to be
Why do i feel my soul
Slowly slipping away?
I preach my own advice
To many who reach for a hand
Why isn't it possible to mend
My own pain?
If i had to make a wish
I would close my eyes and say
I wish upon a gentle person
To release me of this pain

3/8/01
Danyel L. Azar





I slept and dreamed that life was beauty was thy dream then a shadowy lie? -ESH-


[This message has been edited by Temptress*Moon (edited 03-09-2001).]

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Jeremy Redinger
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since 2001-02-27
Posts 46

1 posted 2001-03-08 11:25 PM


A wonderful write... but there's more to it...

Your tears do not go unnoticed, your sadness not ignored. Sometimes one who helps others cannot help themselves... That's what other people are for sometimes. We all need an outlet, someone we know and care about, someone we trust... Someone to talk to. If you ever need someone to talk to, I'm there for you. That goes for anyone reading this too, if you ever need someone to talk to, my email is always open, my ear always listening.

Sincerely,
Jeremy

Verve
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since 1999-06-23
Posts 348
Singapore
2 posted 2001-03-09 03:44 AM



Hey ...

I think a lot of us often wonder why we turn out the way we do. Sometimes we may not like what we see in the mirror anymore.
But I think it's important to be able to see beyond all that we can't be and be happy for what we have been blessed with.
Things can only get better, ya?

Take care

ma miller
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since 2000-07-11
Posts 806

3 posted 2001-03-09 09:09 AM


Temptress*Moon ... i've read this several times now and the meaning is clear, i wonder if focusing on the cause of pain would give it more substance ... what are your demons? ... i really liked the "I wish upon a gentle person" line ... thanks.
Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
4 posted 2001-03-10 05:44 PM


Sad one hon. Myself and others have found ourselves in similar situations, it's like you give it all for everyone else. Always being there, helping, lending an ear, boistering those egos, and then when YOU are done, no one is there for you to do same. All you can do is surround yourself with similar minded friends, who are like you, therefore there when you need a hand or a boost. It took me 30 years to realise this, but once you do things do get better.. hang tough!!!
Isis

*War produces one thing - Cemetaries. And in cemetaries there are no enemies!*
~Isis~~Sovereign of the Spirit.



JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
5 posted 2001-03-11 03:23 AM


Interesting poem...James
JohnDLeclare
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since 2000-07-26
Posts 43

6 posted 2001-03-12 05:52 AM


I think every dream lost takes some of our soul with it. Keep writing.

John

Necro Draconis
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since 2000-05-19
Posts 115

7 posted 2001-03-12 09:27 PM


Couldn't have said it better myself.
Ginners
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since 2000-07-22
Posts 339
Mullica Hill, New Jersey
8 posted 2001-03-15 08:20 AM


Temp- as always a wonderful write. I wish that i could give you a big hug and make it all better
Jellybean King
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since 2001-03-07
Posts 153
Jelly, Bean
9 posted 2001-03-15 06:32 PM


I loved this because the questioning leads to the answer...a gentle person to take away the pain...In my reading I think interwoven in your words is the idea that humans were not designed to fix our own faults...but rather it is our nature to interact/need others (that gentle soul/person)...if that were not so, then we would be complete unto ourselves...this built in vulnerability gives us the compassion to give, and the humility to receive. Very much enjoyed!

Jellybean King

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