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SwEeTnSeXy18
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since 2000-09-18

Posts 247
nc

0 posted 2001-03-08 08:43 PM

"One Too Many"

I remember the guys
Chanting chug, chug
Chug and the next
Morning that toilet
I sure did hug

My eyes were glassy
My head hazy
I said to myself man
I must be crazy

The taste of the alchol
Brings back the memories
Of your death, they seem
Not to want to leave my
Head, I wonder was it
Something I said to bring
You to the end

One of the guys came in
And sat on the couch
And said one too many
My friend, But, I didn't
Care I was in total despair

I knew he was right
I'm sure I looked a sight
We had drank all night
And when I woke up to the
Light, my head hurt so bad
I was sure I'd been in a
Fight, and then I rememebered
You died

By: Lisa Kennedy

~in order to gain, you have to lose~

DJLI
Member

since 2000-06-21

Posts 237
TN, USA

1 posted 2001-03-09 12:08 PM

alot of emotion. good job

P.L.U.R.

qtpieelmo
Senior Member

since 2000-07-04

Posts 989
Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY

2 posted 2001-03-09 01:16 AM

OH WOW--I wasn't expecting that--great work--great imagery--loved it--LOVE ELMO <3

SwEeTnSeXy18
Member

since 2000-09-18

Posts 247
nc

3 posted 2001-03-09 05:55 PM

DJLI:

Thanks for reading it. I'm glad you liked it.Take care.

qtoieelmo:

Thanks! Yeah a lot of emotions were used, its a very strong poem. I guess that it's good that the end was a suprize.

~Lisa~

~in order to gain, you have to lose~

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

4 posted 2001-03-10 10:00 PM

Hey Lisa

this is great, though sad at the end, which I didnt expect either.

wonderful writing m'dear

Maree

I may know the word but not say it
I may know the truth but not face it
I may hear a sound a whisper sacred and profound
but turn my head indifferent.

Natalie Merchant

[This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 03-10-2001).]

Aimster
Member Elite

since 2000-02-19

Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC

5 posted 2001-03-11 02:24 AM

Lisa-

powerful poem sug. many things remind me
of her death too

but hey--we always
have the memories sweetie...and she will
always live in our hearts. never forget
we have an Angel above watching over us.

love ya hon.
amy

"A friend is someone who knows the song in your heart & can sing it back to you when you have forgotten the words."

SwEeTnSeXy18
Member

since 2000-09-18

Posts 247
nc

6 posted 2001-03-11 03:49 PM

Dark Angel:

Thanks for reading. I'm glad that I didn't have it spelled our right away what was going to happen. Suspense is always good I think. Take care.

Amy:

Hey! Thanks for reading and responding to my poem. However, this poem was not about mom. Not about anyone really, it's just a poem. But what you said is true and for that I am forever grateful!

~Lisa~

~in order to gain, you have to lose~

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