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Temptress*Moon
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since 2001-01-15
Posts 240
Long Island, NY

0 posted 2001-03-04 01:42 PM




I once hid behind these butterfly
Eyes
Just a scared little girl
trying so hard to disappear from the world
Lying awake at night, filling my pillow with tears
Not knowing the day would come
When you would capture my fears
On the day you found me
I was scared and alone
You brought me the sunshine
Something that has been missing for so long
I am so happy you found me
We are two of the same
You are my kindred spirit
My world, all my dreams
You took all my sorrow
You buried it within, making my life complete with you by my side
i am thankful for you
You are my true love
I promise from this day forth to give you all my love



I slept and dreamed that life was beauty was thy dream then a shadowy lie? -ESH-


[This message has been edited by Temptress*Moon (edited 03-04-2001).]

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Jeremy Redinger
Junior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 46

1 posted 2001-03-04 03:22 PM


You weave the web of gratitude and love so very well, I am in awe. Such beautiful poetry, such a beautiful poem, such a beautiful heart. I find myself searching for poems by you... And I am not dissapointed. Keep writing, and I will keep reading
Kethry
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
2 posted 2001-03-04 04:04 PM


Temptress Moon,
isn't it strange how love can turn everything around? Excellent write!
Kethry


Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.



JamesMichael
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
3 posted 2001-03-04 04:16 PM


"I am so happy you found me."
Enjoyed reading your poem...very soft...James

Severn
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

4 posted 2001-03-04 05:14 PM


A gentle poem indeed...and ending with such a loving, positive note

I just have a couple of spelling mistakes to point out:

disapear - disappear
fourth - forth



thanks for the read

K

Temptress*Moon
Member
since 2001-01-15
Posts 240
Long Island, NY
5 posted 2001-03-04 06:52 PM


Severn,
Thanks for the spelling i tend to type quick and not realize the spelling
Thanks to everyone for responding with such wonderful words to my poems, I know they aren't the best but this is all new to me, and i'll hopefully get better with time
Jeremy,
I Look for your poems too*S*



I slept and dreamed that life was beauty was thy dream then a shadowy lie? -ESH-

Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
6 posted 2001-03-04 08:19 PM


You are getting better, with each poem of yours I read!!! Give yourself time hon..
Beautiful sentiments here, brought a smile..
Thanks
Isis

*War produces one thing - Cemetaries. And in cemetaries there are no enemies!*
~Isis~~Sovereign of the Spirit.



Temptress*Moon
Member
since 2001-01-15
Posts 240
Long Island, NY
7 posted 2001-03-04 08:35 PM


ISIS,
Coming from you that is a great compliment*S*
Thank you for reading
Temptress*Moon



I slept and dreamed that life was beauty was thy dream then a shadowy lie? -ESH-

Ginners
Member
since 2000-07-22
Posts 339
Mullica Hill, New Jersey
8 posted 2001-03-05 10:56 AM


Temp- as always this is a wonderful write! thanks for sharing

"I'll build a wall if we can keep them on the other side"---NIN
"There is no always forever, just this"-the cure

MiseryDivine
Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 114
Chicago! en america...oh lala! i wish i lived in England.....(sigh)
9 posted 2001-03-06 10:44 PM


awww..how adorably cute!>..I'm so happy so you! great poem...you write beautiful!

Red-uni
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since 2000-07-30
Posts 192
Georgia, USA
10 posted 2001-03-07 10:37 AM


Enjoyed your poem, a lovely write.
Red

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