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Temptress*Moon
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since 2001-01-15
Posts 240
Long Island, NY

0 posted 2001-02-27 09:52 PM




Mixed up and hazed
Clouded thoughts in my mind
confusion spirals around me
Many tears fall to the ground
What have i done?
How could i have been so cruel
Turning my back, and Never trying
To love you
I ran from everything
I ran so far from you
Regreting every step i took
Why couldn't i find the courage
To love you
I have lost you forever
Caused you so much pain
It's braking me apart
That i tared out your heart
Never giving us a chance to
Start the journey of our love
I'm sorry i stepped into your
Life
If it wasn't for me
You wouldn't feel this way
Turning your heart to stone
Turning your back on love




I slept and dreamed that life was beauty was thy dream then a shadowy lie? -ESH-

© Copyright 2001 Danyel L. Azar - All Rights Reserved
G. A. Webb
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since 2000-01-21
Posts 441
Stanton, California, USA
1 posted 2001-02-27 10:46 PM


OH MY GOD!!! I love this! I only wish that somebody I know felt this way. Oh well, at least I got something out of it. It was because of her that I started writing in the first place just a few years ago. So maybe you affected this person profoundly in some why and you don't even know it. Take comfort in knowing that you are both better off having known each other. Godd work!

G

Regret not that which you have done,
Rather that which you haven't


Xeonox
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2 posted 2001-02-27 11:54 PM


I think my ex might have felt this way, but I hope she could read this poem and describe the hurt that she put me through.

PS, their are two mispelled words (braking should me breaking and tared, should be tore)

Keep it up. Great poem. I enjoyed every line.


Ronil (The sweet sound of summer sends serenity through my soul searching for that evermore solitude.)




[This message has been edited by Xeonox (edited 02-27-2001).]

mystic requiem
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since 2001-01-26
Posts 144

3 posted 2001-02-28 08:34 AM


Beautiful!
And all the more beautiful because your
message is an unselfish one.
*thanx*




Jeremy Redinger
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since 2001-02-27
Posts 46

4 posted 2001-02-28 05:04 PM


Oh if only my lost love felt this way. So deeply she hurt me... and continues to hurt me. A wonderful piece that strikes the heart. Thank you.
Verve
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since 1999-06-23
Posts 348
Singapore
5 posted 2001-03-01 09:57 AM




I am sure your plea won't go unheard if he ever reads this ...
This was quite heart-wrenching ...
Great work!

Celeste
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since 2000-11-11
Posts 597

6 posted 2001-03-02 01:51 AM


You echo my heart completely tonight. I thank you for doing it so well.


"The secret of change is to focus all of your energy, not on fighting the old, but on building the new.

Socrates

Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
7 posted 2001-03-02 10:38 PM


Love should always be unselfish, but usually *sigh* it isn't!! Thanks for reminding any reader of the way it should be...
Great stuff hon..
Isis

*War produces one thing - Cemetaries. And in cemetaries there are no enemies!*
~Isis~~Sovereign of the Spirit.



Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
8 posted 2001-03-03 12:23 PM


Temptress Moon,
thanks for writing this I needed to hear it.
write on
Kethry


Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.



Temptress*Moon
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since 2001-01-15
Posts 240
Long Island, NY
9 posted 2001-03-04 12:33 PM


Everyone,
It means a great deal to me to get the responses that i do for my poetry*S*
It's warming to know that something i write can touch so many people....This is all new to me and i still have much to learn about writing.
but writing has become a way out for me, a way to express the feelings that i am going through
Thank you all again for reading*S*
Temptress*Moon



I slept and dreamed that life was beauty was thy dream then a shadowy lie? -ESH-

Ginners
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since 2000-07-22
Posts 339
Mullica Hill, New Jersey
10 posted 2001-03-04 12:35 PM


Temp- as always wonderful. I really liked this and could identify with it.

"I'll build a wall if we can keep them on the other side"---NIN
"There is no always forever, just this"-the cure

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