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Jeremy Redinger Junior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 46 |
This is the old 'Sage Mithril' at passions, now going under my real name 'Jeremy Redinger'. Haven't put much on the internet in a long while, so I suppose this is sort of a coming home in that respect. I wrote this about 20 - 30 minutes ago for some site that had length limits on it, and so I had to condense it down somewhat from what I'd have liked it to have been... Still, I reread it several times, and I thought it was pretty good. Then I remembered this place here, and how good I used to feel putting my poetry out for people to see. I've got a bunch more that I've written over the past couple of years, but I think I'll let this one break the ice on my style of poetry for you all. Anyway, I have a big problem with not knowing when to BE QUIET... so here you go  *blush* Swept Away By Jeremy Redinger Sky night rests her wings on my shoulders, No one knows the caress of her dark shadows; No being could know and remain. She comes and she goes, Wind blowing in her wake, Sending a chill through the hearts of those she passes. Home in the sky, Home in her gentle grasp. I'm slipping away, Feathers so soft they summon me away; No more is the world I once knew, Only this tranquil blanket of enigma. My eyes blink my heart into infinity; My mind for once at ease. Be I here or be I gone one thing remains, My gratitude, forever, for my home angelic sky. |
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blackhalo Member
since 2000-02-15
Posts 467Denver, CO |
Amazing. Truly amazing. I am speechless. Wonderful post. Welcome (back) to Passions! Alicia A. Renzelman |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Welcome back!!!!! This is absolutely beautiful Jeremy and I'm Soooooo glad you decided to share it with us!!!!! Beautiful imagery!!!! Isis *War produces one thing - Cemetaries. And in cemetaries there are no enemies!* ~Isis~~Sovereign of the Spirit. |
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mystic requiem Member
since 2001-01-26
Posts 144 |
*applause* This is a great poem to break the ice with. More of this quality please!! *thanx*   |
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Temptress*Moon Member
since 2001-01-15
Posts 240Long Island, NY |
Jeremy, This was beautiful, I loved every word of it.... Please post all you have*S* Temptress*Moon I slept and dreamed that life was beauty was thy dream then a shadowy lie? -ESH- |
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Celeste Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597 |
I thank you for the chance to see a different viewpoint than I normally feel. I needed that tonight! Beautifully written. Welcome back. "The secret of change is to focus all of your energy, not on fighting the old, but on building the new. Socrates |
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Temptress*Moon Member
since 2001-01-15
Posts 240Long Island, NY |
Jeremy, I had to stop by and reread this piece, It is such a beautiful one...one in which i will keep*S* Temptress*Moon I slept and dreamed that life was beauty was thy dream then a shadowy lie? -ESH- |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Jeremy, welcome back, with poetry like this you could make this place home. write on Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Jeremy Redinger Junior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 46 |
I am in utter awe. To recieve such a warm welcome here, I am truely grateful. For people who want to help me grow as a poet, in poetry, for the most part, I don't care about weather it rhymes, the flow, or anything that has anything to do with how it's written unless I feel it conveys an emotion (or in some cases a thought) more powerfully. I don't think poetry should be about how you write it, but rather poetry should be about how well a poet expresses thoughts and feelings (which don't necessarily have to be their own). So, when your posting a response, if you want to help me out, and help me grow as a poet (Or aren't sure what to write about my poetry, but want to say SOMETHING), let me know how my poem made you feel, or let me know what my poem made you think. Many of you did exactly this, and it's helped me, it's made me feel good... And those who didn't, the shear fact that you responded, and enjoyed my poem makes me feel good. Thank you. Anyway, I'm off to go read some more of your wonderful poetry. And once again, thank you for your welcoming me to DP. |
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