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*prevailing*darkness*
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since 2000-12-18
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Port Richey, FL

0 posted 2001-02-25 09:24 PM


Repetitive Pain

I look at the sun, I see nothing.
The rain has the colors, my tears have the pain.
I look out at the world, I see nothing.
The people are fake, my mind is a pool.
I hear words, but I cannot listen.
I open my mouth, but I cannot speak.
If you cannot understand my silence,
then you cannot understand my words.
I see your hand touching mine,
but I cannot feel your love.
I hear my name being screamed,
but it doesn’t phase me.
I don’t even react.
I just sit in my own minds’ pool…
a pool of misery.
Finally, I squeeze out tears.
Tears of confusion and hate,
tears of pain and anger.
My minds’ pool has over flown with hurt.
Reality grips me in its merciless hands, and I can’t take anymore.
I took the plunge.
I fell so fast that I missed the ground.
I reach a state of consciousness
but I see only blackness…
Everything seems to be blank.
I am at the beginning
back to where I started again.
Back to start over again
just to repeat the end…
to begin again.



*Until you find something worth dying for, you're not really living*


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mystic requiem
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since 2001-01-26
Posts 144

1 posted 2001-02-26 12:42 PM


A good weaving of thoughts.
"If you cannot understand my silence,
then you cannot understand my words." ...love this!
*thanx*

Temptress
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Posts 7136
Mobile, AL
2 posted 2001-02-26 09:05 PM


"I fell so fast I missed the ground"
WOW! The whole poem was great, but this was my favorite line! Excellent expression of pain and what seems like depression.

Swamp¤Faeryie
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since 2000-12-04
Posts 393
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3 posted 2001-02-27 01:40 PM


"I look out at the world, I see nothing.
The people are fake, my mind is a pool."

the past few days that statement has struck me as brutally correct. oh vell...this was such a good poem,very good indeed

sammi


much madness is divinest sense~Emily Dickinson

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since 2000-04-01
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4 posted 2001-02-27 08:52 PM


Great work. I enjoyed this lines especially.
"If you cannot understand my silence,
then you cannot understand my words."

Keep it up.



Ronil (The sweet sound of summer sends serenity through my soul searching for that evermore solitude.)



*prevailing*darkness*
Junior Member
since 2000-12-18
Posts 36
Port Richey, FL
5 posted 2001-02-27 09:39 PM


Thank you all very much. Yes, it's a bit depressing, but it's all me. I love reading your replies, so thanks to all of you who took the time to reply. It means a lot!

*Until you find something worth dying for, you're not really living*


deerfawn
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since 2001-02-28
Posts 4
Texas, USA
6 posted 2001-02-28 07:40 PM


I'm very new here, but when I read your poem I was struck hard. Perhaps your meaning was different than my understanding, but it put my heart into words. It was like giving voice to how I feel about my brothers death and how I deal with it each time I attend a funeral or comfort a friend whose lost someone. Thank you so much for your beautiful words. You have an amazing gift.
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