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Verve Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 348Singapore |
Sweet promises broken, Now all that's left are empty words ... Forgotten. How did I ever become, Your whore on call? Do you even remember when you once said, 'Baby, I wouldn't share this with anyone else'. You swept me away, With words so pretty. You vowed your love undying, And I fell right in, Into your trap of carnal sin. All because you said, 'Baby, I wouldn't share this with anyone else'. And now here I am, Another notch on your bedpost. Hopelessly lost in your canopy of lust, I did what I thought love must. And it never felt wrong, Only because you said, 'Baby, I wouldn't share this with anyone else'. But now you tell me, I am no one special in your life, That what I imagined to be us Was only mine. That all I am is just A cause of your wasted time. So why the hell did you ever say, 'Baby, I wouldn't share this with anyone else'. [This message has been edited by Verve (edited 02-25-2001).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Verve you have expressed your frustration and anger well. Speaking from experience there are many that know exactly the actions to take and the words to speak to get what they want... they can appear very sincere until they get what they want... Many want only the fun and romance and not the responsibility...James |
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Temptress*Moon Member
since 2001-01-15
Posts 240Long Island, NY |
Sounds like a familar song to me  This was an excellent well expressed write* Temptress*Moon I slept and dreamed that life was beauty was thy dream then a shadowy lie? -ESH- |
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*prevailing*darkness* Junior Member
since 2000-12-18
Posts 36Port Richey, FL |
wow. I really liked this piece. Strong and very straight-forward. It's kind of like a slap in the face for everybody involved. I can realate to this. Great writing... keep it up!  *Until you find something worth dying for, you're not really living* |
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qtpieelmo Senior Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 989Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY |
yea this is all too familiar--i was the one he said i love you too for 2 years--now he said he never cared & i'm just a whore & a slut--no longer his sweetheart--ok ok i'm fine--great poem--LOVE ELMO <3 |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
oh yes~ heard that all too familar line before. u think you mean something and you're just another name to add to his list. makes you feel like dirt. but hey we all learn from our mistakes..he'll realize what trash he is for doing this to you *dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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G. A. Webb Member
since 2000-01-21
Posts 441Stanton, California, USA |
Bravo! I'm with ya on every word. I was nothing more than an experiance to someone who I foolishly fell in love with. Sadly, the only who payed the price was me. Good job, thanks for sharing it! G Regret not that which you have done, Rather that which you haven't |
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Verve Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 348Singapore |
Hi James, thank you for your wise words ... I suppose that many of us would have learnt this the hard way. Perhaps that's what they call live and learn ... I hope I have gained valuable lessons from this episode. Temptress* Moon: Hey ... Thank you so much for dropping in again ... I am grateful for your kind words. 'prevailing darkness': I guess i did intend for it to turn that way ... and i am glad it actually appealed to you. Thanx for reading this! qtpieelmo & DancinQueen: I am sure we'll fare much better without jerks like them ... But sometimes i just feel so incredulously stupid for not ever seeing through him earlier. G. A. Webb: Hi G, i am really glad that you thought well of this piece of work. By the way, you write extremely well and i always enjoy reading your postings. cheers, verve~ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
i thought that this was written quite nicely. Wonderful expression of anger. Hopefull we'll all learn from this, and so shall you.....good luck  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
Verve ... this does have song-like qualities to it ... maybe from the repeated last line in each stanza ... a piece from the heart, no doubt and well said ... thanks. |
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BitterSmoke Member
since 2001-01-02
Posts 54 |
yes...I have learned the reason for booze. I am not sure I understand these people that can share love and then turn around and walk away without a second glance. Very painful. BitterSmoke |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
oh, no not a whore, open and loving, if someone lies, they are the whore.... great read here Kathleen Blake "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee |
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