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G. A. Webb
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since 2000-01-21
Posts 441
Stanton, California, USA

0 posted 2001-02-21 11:08 PM


It now seems that I
Can't play anymore
A cruel twist of fate
Is slamming the door
How many more times
To God I implore
Why is it I'm shunned
By those I adore
Will this keep on happening
On evermore
There has to be new roads
I beg to explore
But yet I'm still trapped here
Chained to this floor
Growing so tired
And weaker and sore
'Cause there's one painful fact
That I just can't ignore
It's simply that I
Can't play anymore

G. A. Webb


Regret not that which you have done,
Rather that which you haven't


© Copyright 2001 G. A. Webb - All Rights Reserved
Songbird
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since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184
Missouri
1 posted 2001-02-22 01:20 AM


You expressed your sorrow well, and maybe it is now time to make some new friends. Here's hoping you'll find true friends.
dragonpoe
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since 2000-11-12
Posts 608
Palm Bay, Florida
2 posted 2001-02-22 02:12 PM


Wow. I am impressed with this one. Well written and chosen in a strict, difficult rhyme theme. It's hard to rhyme one word throughout a whole poem and make it smooth. Well done.


With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free..
dragonpoe

Temptress*Moon
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since 2001-01-15
Posts 240
Long Island, NY
3 posted 2001-02-22 05:31 PM


This was very beautiful, and sad
Temptress*Moon



I slept and dreamed that life was beauty was thy dream then a shadowy lie? -ESH-

Verve
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since 1999-06-23
Posts 348
Singapore
4 posted 2001-02-23 01:44 AM




Exquisite. Well done!

G. A. Webb
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since 2000-01-21
Posts 441
Stanton, California, USA
5 posted 2001-02-25 11:37 AM


Songbird: My friends aren't the problem, it's the ones I fall in love with that are. It seems I living a catch 22. For you see, the women that I have fallen in love with don't fall in love with me and those who do fall for me, I don't for them. For example there's a Devo song called Baby Doll and the first 2 lines go as follows:

Girl of my dreams she don't love me
Always the way it seems to be
My Baby doll

So it would appear that I'm not the only one who knows what that's like. Oh well, hopefully some day that cycle will end and I will fall for someone that actually falls for me at the same time. Wish me luck and thanks for replying.

dragonpoe: That's hard to do??? Sorry, I didn't know that, this was easy for me. It's just what came out of my twisted mind one day. But anyways, thank you, I'm glad you liked it.

Temptress*Moon: Thank you, I agree, if I do say so myself.

Verve:And thank you as well, I'm glad you liked it.

G

Regret not that which you have done,
Rather that which you haven't


mystic requiem
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since 2001-01-26
Posts 144

6 posted 2001-02-26 12:15 PM


I enjoyed your weaving of thoughts.
Great!
*S*

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