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wandering
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since 2001-01-21
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0 posted 2001-02-20 07:35 PM


I toe the line
Hesitant to cross
With eyes closed I lean towards loss
I don't have the strength to run
Falling before I decide to jump
On the edge of love

Looking down
At what I fear
Through eyes blind with tears
From staring at the sun
Falling before I decide to jump
On the edge of love

Without wings I plummet
Headlong into the storm
Cradled within the fury of feelings newly born
I feel I've finally won
Falling before I decide to jump
On the edge of love



lost in thought, found in words.
wanderer

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since 2001-02-20
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1 posted 2001-02-20 08:16 PM


"falling before i decide to jump"
i love that line

enjoyed the rest of the poem al well

Temptress*Moon
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since 2001-01-15
Posts 240
Long Island, NY
2 posted 2001-02-20 11:10 PM


I enjoyed this one*
Temptress*Moon



I slept and dreamed that life was beauty was thy dream then a shadowy lie? -ESH-

Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
3 posted 2001-02-21 03:16 AM


Wandering,
This is a well written and emotional poem. I enjoyed it
Write on
Kethry


Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.



Verve
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since 1999-06-23
Posts 348
Singapore
4 posted 2001-02-22 11:48 AM




I can relate to this one alrite ...
Nice work.

dragonpoe
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since 2000-11-12
Posts 608
Palm Bay, Florida
5 posted 2001-02-22 02:05 PM


this has a great musical ring to it. I guess it is the style you chose to write, reads off as good lyrics. Enjoyed the read!


With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free..
dragonpoe

taramw
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 738

6 posted 2001-02-23 06:52 AM


I liked the images you created... your piece meant a lot to me... thank you for sharing Take care.

~ Tara ~


may you live all the days of your life. -- jonathan swift

Songbird
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since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184
Missouri
7 posted 2001-02-23 01:14 PM


You describe those feeling very accurately. Good lines.
EagleOne
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since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...
8 posted 2001-02-24 02:49 AM


Excellent!

"I've done all the dumb things"....Paul Kelly

JLR
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since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785

9 posted 2001-02-24 04:55 PM


I really like this! I like the way you repeat those lines...they're great ones.
mystic requiem
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since 2001-01-26
Posts 144

10 posted 2001-02-26 12:54 PM


Simply wonderful!
*thanx*

mYsTiC

[This message has been edited by mystic requiem (edited 02-26-2001).]

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