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Dark Poetry #3

moshpit
Member

since 1999-11-25

Posts 143
cebu, philippines

0 posted 2001-02-16 05:27 AM

When Father time forgets,
Let me run to that tree
Where my brothers used to cry
So that I may hang my sullen feet
Up in her endless arms
And view the world as it is--
The orange sky below,
The lazy earth above,
While the horizon remains
As unmoving and unfeeling
As the futility of my reach.

Songbird
Member Elite

since 1999-12-15

Posts 2184
Missouri

1 posted 2001-02-16 09:55 AM

I love this poem, such great perspective in it. Makes me want to hang upside down in that tree. Great imagination shown here.

Swamp¤Faeryie
Member

since 2000-12-04

Posts 393
fairyland....of course;)

2 posted 2001-02-16 07:00 PM

this was ingenius...it took me awhile to figure it out....very creative i loved it!! it was like i was upside-down too. Well done!! I think i'll put this in my library.

swamp

Do i contradict myself?Very well i contradict myself.I contain multitudes.~walt whitman

Ginners
Member

since 2000-07-22

Posts 339
Mullica Hill, New Jersey

3 posted 2001-02-16 07:10 PM

I liked this upside down thingie, it takes a few minutes to figure out, but i think that is what makes a poem good, it makes ppl think.

Temptress*Moon
Member

since 2001-01-15

Posts 240
Long Island, NY

4 posted 2001-02-16 07:51 PM

This was a beautiful piece*S*
Temptress*Moon

I slept and dreamed that life was beauty was thy dream then a shadowy lie? -ESH-

taramw
Senior Member

since 2000-06-08

Posts 738

5 posted 2001-02-16 10:38 PM

This has such tremendous expression and evokes many feelings

Great read! Take care.
~ Tara ~

may you live all the days of your life. -- jonathan swift

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