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dragonpoe
Senior Member

since 2000-11-12

Posts 608
Palm Bay, Florida

0 posted 2001-02-15 07:48 PM

The Grain of Blood

In loved I vowed eternal oath
And basked my heart in light.
And gave you my all, my innocence
As you had taken me in the night.

I hunger for what I can not have.

You came to me in glittered splendor
With forked tongue you beguiled me.
You showed me the world with out bars
And gave me dream and reality.

I hunger for what I can not have.

Forsaken vows, my heart does bleed
At your feet I wither
And you continue on in strength
Upon another’s heart you slither.

I hunger for what I can not have.

What have you done to me?
That I can not see the light;
Yet a prisoner to your charms
As you leave me in the night.

I hunger for what I can not have.
Joann Renee' Muszynski 2/15/01

With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free..
dragonpoe

Temptress*Moon
Member

since 2001-01-15

Posts 240
Long Island, NY

1 posted 2001-02-15 07:50 PM

Dragon...LOVED this one..Excellent
Write*S*
Temptress*Moon

I slept and dreamed that life was beauty was thy dream then a shadowy lie? -ESH-

Swamp¤Faeryie
Member

since 2000-12-04

Posts 393
fairyland....of course;)

2 posted 2001-02-15 10:52 PM

this was exquisite!! well written,reminds me of a song from my favorite band that says "last night i saw you in a dream,yes i saw the snake that feeds upon your heart,i saw how utterly wretched you are,but i bear no grudge." good poem!!

swampie sam

Do i contradict myself?Very well i contradict myself.I contain multitudes.~walt whitman

!!!
Member

since 2000-08-12

Posts 137
VA (U.S.A)

3 posted 2001-02-15 11:45 PM

This was indeed
a very good read.
Indeed, indeed.
Its nice how you kept the whole 'hunger for what you cant have' theme going in the poem.

Ginners
Member

since 2000-07-22

Posts 339
Mullica Hill, New Jersey

4 posted 2001-02-16 07:26 PM

very very nice i enjoyed it very much

"I'll build a wall if we can keep them on the other side"---NIN
"There is no always forever, just this"-the cure

MiseryDivine
Member

since 2000-06-13

Posts 114
Chicago! en america...oh lala! i wish i lived in England.....(sigh)

5 posted 2001-02-16 11:57 PM

ohh wow...this was really really good! more than good, it was great! its one of those feelings that i never could put to words n you did an excellent job at doing so!

dragonpoe
Senior Member

since 2000-11-12

Posts 608
Palm Bay, Florida

6 posted 2001-02-17 07:33 AM

Thank you all for your kind words. I was in an exceptionally dark mood yesterday and thought I'd scribble a bit

thanks again!

With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free..
dragonpoe

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

7 posted 2001-02-17 03:19 PM

You know I feel this way many times...I am hungering and desiring that which I cannot have...well only briefly and then it disappears as suddenly as it appears..as if constantly in motion...James

Isis
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-06

Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

8 posted 2001-02-17 06:00 PM

Most of us have hungered for that which we can not have!
True your special friend may have 'showed' you more, some little miracles all your own. But they didn't create them, they were there in you all along, your friend merely opened the door.
Knowing this now it's time to continue the journey on your own and with more power at your disposal....

Isis

*War produces one thing - Cemetaries. And in cemetaries there are no enemies!*
~Isis~~Sovereign of the Spirit.

JohnDLeclare
Junior Member

since 2000-07-26

Posts 43

9 posted 2001-03-12 05:57 AM

Giving your heart to some one is a dangerous thing. I liked reading this.

John

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