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dragonpoe
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Palm Bay, Florida

0 posted 2001-02-15 07:41 PM



Tapping

The night wears on, low and cold
No candle burns in my window.
I am draped in darkness, cloaked
In fear as I listen to the tapping.

Tip, Tap, Pit, Pat
Against the shingled roof.
Tap, Tip, Pit, Pat
Against the shingled roof.

From the time the sun touched horizon
I locked the doors, windows barred
And hid within the great armchair
In fear as I listen to the rapping.

Tip, Tap, Pit, Pat
Against the shingled roof.
Tap, Tip, Pit, Pat
Against the shingled roof.

May God see me this dreary night
And save my soul, as I repent my sins
For surely ‘tis the devil now
At my window tapping.

Tip, Tap, Pit, Pat
Against the shingled roof.
Tap, Tip, Pit, Pat
Against the shingled roof.

My mind screams “Surrender!” as this
Night wears on low and cold
And I hear it at my pane now
At my window rapping.

Tip, Tap, Pit, Pat
Against the window pane.
Tap, Tip, Pit, Pat
Against the window pane.

Creak, crack, window split
God has forsaken me.
Inside my house, my heart, my mind
In fear I hear him tapping.

Tip, Tap, Pit, Pat
Against my tattered soul.
Tap, Tip, Pit, Pat
Against my tattered soul.
Joann Renee' Muszynski 2/15/01




With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free..
dragonpoe

© Copyright 2001 Joann Renee' Muszynski - All Rights Reserved
Swamp¤Faeryie
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1 posted 2001-02-15 10:56 PM


veeery interesting....i liked!!

sammo


Do i contradict myself?Very well i contradict myself.I contain multitudes.~walt whitman

Ginners
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2 posted 2001-02-15 11:34 PM


this was nice i enjoyed it very much
Panne415
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San Antonio
3 posted 2001-03-30 10:16 PM


Hi Dpoe,

I enjoyed reading this. Reminds me of another Poe(Edgar Allen). Ya had me on the edge waiting...waiting...waiting...

Panne

Kethry
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4 posted 2001-03-31 06:01 AM


Spooky and eerie the way you used the repetitive lines. Well done!
Kethry

Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.



dragonpoe
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5 posted 2001-03-31 08:13 AM


thanks all for your kind words.. Panne, to be even considered in the same thought with Edgar Allen Poe just thrills me.. Thanks!

With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free..
dragonpoe

kaile
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6 posted 2001-03-31 12:06 PM


well, i dont read much of Poe to know enough

but i do know that i was rushing through this intense piece to get to the end and the ending made me think about what the character is going to lead his life from now on...

enjoyed the read

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7 posted 2001-03-31 04:02 PM


Very powerful piece.  Nicely written.  The repitition went alone perfectly.  Good job.

--Marie

It's true that we don't know what we've got until we lose it, but it's also true that we don't know what we've been missing until it arrives.

mirror man
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8 posted 2001-04-01 03:31 AM


Good read on a rainy night.  
a-alibaster
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9 posted 2001-04-02 11:18 AM


...and I think Poe was reading over my shoulder...
Wonderful read Dear....
Until...ali

a-alibaster
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10 posted 2001-04-02 11:18 AM


...and I think Poe was reading over my shoulder...
Wonderful read Dear....
Until...ali

"There is an alter ego which
dwells in every soul..."
a-alibaster

"I am as I am, nothing more, nothing less,
I am tears of pain, tears of Death.

coyote
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11 posted 2001-04-04 06:34 PM


The tapping is that of a white cane,
for death is blind,
and takes whom he can find.

Good Poe-ness, thanks.  

"I hate quotes, they suck!"
I.G. Norance

Temptress
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12 posted 2001-04-04 06:55 PM


ahh..I got chills reading this..I did. Enjoyed very much.

still d-i-s-c-o-n-n-e-c-t-e-d
I am bound by this, you see...to become Night's sole mistress, and I am jealous in my endeavours for his attention.

Honeybee
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13 posted 2001-04-08 06:28 PM



The pain and unending torment leaps from your words, I relate very much so.  Excellent expression, flow, rhyme, repetition of key phrases and Edgar Allan "Poe-esque" style~

Take care,
Melissa~

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