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!!!
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0 posted 2001-02-15 01:02 AM




The quiet pitter-patter of the rains,
During this cold, and dreary day.
The soft sounds of cars cruising water-soaked lanes...

Through it all i sleep peacefully away.

The white sky becomes heavy with clouds of gray,
As soft, raindrops relentlessly pound the ground.
Inside, on my couch, i sleep the day away
To the lullaby outside that plays it's cold, rainy sound.


The wind blows cold along the wet, icy ground
Under the sky, with it's many shades of gray.
As the droplets of rain tumble endlessly down...

Through it all i sleep.....peacefully away.


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Xeonox
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1 posted 2001-02-15 01:55 AM


Great poetry. I really enjoyed the simplicity of it.

Ronil (The sweet sound of summer sends serenity through my soul searching for that evermore solitude.)



Baby G
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since 2001-01-28
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2 posted 2001-02-15 06:12 AM


Most people say how the rain makes them feel safe and warm inside their house, and they sleep really well listening to it...me?? I must be weird it keeps me awake hahaha. But anywho great poem!
taramw
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3 posted 2001-02-15 06:14 AM


I adored this Know the feeling... thanks for sharing Take care.

~ Tara ~


may you live all the days of your life. -- jonathan swift

!!!
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4 posted 2001-02-15 11:28 AM


Xenox- Thank you for the comment. Once again, im going by that quote "Less is more".I have found that to be very helpful in my poems.

Baby G- Ahhh, dont worry about it. If it keeps ya awake, it doesnt make you wierd. And me, i prefer to feel nice, and cool when i sleep in, or when its raining outside. i like rain, because then it gets somewhat cool, or cold ouside

Taramw- Im glad you enjoyed it so. It was a pleasure to share. Thanks for reading.

Swamp¤Faeryie
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5 posted 2001-02-15 11:56 AM


i loved this,it was very calm and kind of whisperey....it's grey and raining today outside,i considered sleeping all day also... loved this poem,it's very well written....

swamp


Do i contradict myself?Very well i contradict myself.I contain multitudes.~walt whitman

Ginners
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since 2000-07-22
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Mullica Hill, New Jersey
6 posted 2001-02-15 01:32 PM


i really liked this, it was beautifully written and so simple

"I'll build a wall if we can keep them on the other side"---NIN
"There is no always forever, just this"-the cure

laryalee
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since 2000-06-19
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Alberta, Canada
7 posted 2001-02-15 03:15 PM


So nice and peaceful, almost hypnotic with its drowsy softness...like a warm float...
Very nice!
Lary

dragonpoe
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8 posted 2001-02-15 04:43 PM


I enjoyed it too. Feeling a connection or familiarity in it. Well written

With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free..
dragonpoe

Temptress*Moon
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9 posted 2001-02-15 07:54 PM


Loving this write*S*
Great work here
Temptress*Moon



I slept and dreamed that life was beauty was thy dream then a shadowy lie? -ESH-

!!!
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VA (U.S.A)
10 posted 2001-02-15 11:22 PM


Swamp Faeryie- Thanx for readin my poem. I had WANTED to sleep in today, cuz it was rainin too, but i had to go to class. Pity.

Ginners- Im glad you enjoyed it. I didnt want to stretch it out, and besides, it was 2 in the morning already when i had finished. Not that it mattered to me...

Laryalee- Thanx for reading. Basically, i just wrote whatever came to my mind, from my heart.

Dragonpoe- Glad you enjoyed it, and were able to identify with it.

Temptress Moon- Thanx for reading, and its great that you enjoyed the read.

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