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DJLI
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since 2000-06-21
Posts 237
TN, USA

0 posted 2001-02-05 11:32 AM


He sits down across from me,
a smile upon his face,
and hands me a bottle of Vodka,
raising up his cup to salute this place.

A look of victory settles about him,
he knows hes broken my will,
and knows that I'll accept his triumph,
and allow him to take his fill.

He looks at me,
with his shining bright eyes,
and wipes away my tears,
that I've been trying hard not to cry.

I look to him with wonder,
how could a person like this get to me?
Deep inside I know he thinks the same,
how can the two of us ever be?

This all must be Fate's idea of a joke,
or maybe just an odd dream,
but when I look at him I'm always thinking,
Is he really as he seems?



P.L.U.R.

© Copyright 2001 Lisa Marie - All Rights Reserved
dragonpoe
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since 2000-11-12
Posts 608
Palm Bay, Florida
1 posted 2001-02-05 11:50 AM


Interesting write. I believe in going with gut feeling, or that inner instinct when something deep inside says something isn't right. I like how you painted a clear scene, almost like telling a story and ending it with the bit of wonder, saying the story still continues.. Would like to read the final chapter, when he shows his true self  

With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free..
dragonpoe

Dark_kisses_Within
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since 2000-03-21
Posts 680
Kansas
2 posted 2001-02-05 12:24 PM


Yes I agree, go with your gut on this one.  I learned something that helped me deal alot with my past.  You know the *old* saying...... you cant change someone? Well the NEW saying is just this... you CANT change another person to be as you want him to be, BUT you can DEMAND respect!!   So many people stay in these sort of situations ( me included ) but we all know deep down inside when it is time to move on.  I knew when and so shall you!  Good luck to you

Mags

BTW... You did a GREAT job explaining this!


No person is worth your tears, and the only one that is ...... will never make you cry


He
Junior Member
since 2001-01-15
Posts 41

3 posted 2001-02-05 12:58 PM


your questions are those
so many of us have asked
and are no doubt asking
even as I write

This speaks to all


mystic requiem
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since 2001-01-26
Posts 144

4 posted 2001-02-05 01:44 PM


I wonder how many of us show the world several different faces.
This is good food for thought.
*thanx*

Ginners
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since 2000-07-22
Posts 339
Mullica Hill, New Jersey
5 posted 2001-02-05 04:10 PM


Behind every person is someone else and behind that someone else is another someone else, that is what humanity is like.  the best feeling is when you let someone see who is really behind them all and they show you who they really are.  Good write.
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