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armanca
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since 1999-07-07
Posts 211
Tennessee

0 posted 2001-02-04 11:19 PM



Remember the blood that
dripped onto the floor.
Each drop which sounded
like the ocean coming
to claim it's flood.

The gleam in your eyes
I had never seen before.
The brighter your eyes
got... the closer
I came to the light.

Powerless against you,
that's all I had ever been.
I layed beneath you,
not being able to move.
and not even daring to.

I wonder if only
I had loved you more.
I could have stopped the hurt.
and I am aware that I am
not suppose to blame myself.

When did you realize
was it the night
I almost died
or the week before that
Has it even happened yet?

So, maybe if you had
only loved me more.
I wouldn't have had
to be washed up on the
shores by my red tide.


~Carman~



© Copyright 2001 Carman - All Rights Reserved
JOY 14
Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA
1 posted 2001-02-04 11:46 PM


There's many stories in the book of life. Don't let this keep you from the rest of them.

Joy

dragonpoe
Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608
Palm Bay, Florida
2 posted 2001-02-05 11:42 AM


This one stops me and makes me think. I can't decide what perspective to read this from. It is moving and mysterious. It gives me two distinct images. Despite this, I enjoyed the read so much so, I read it twice!


With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free..
dragonpoe

armanca
Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 211
Tennessee
3 posted 2001-02-07 12:58 PM


Thank you Joy and Dragon... your replies are much appreciated  


Carman

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