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The Shadow I left Behind
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The Shadow I left Behind |
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Lady Lost Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 470
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Looking at all I have Memories are the only thing I find Right where I left them. The house is empty now, I sit on the cold hardwood floor Remembering… Stolen kisses in the living room Laughter, whispering and carpet stains…. You know that the closet door is still dented I can’t believe I was so angry. That will be coming out of the deposit, I’m sure. The bedroom… Hmm…where can I begin? Tears, sweat, lonliness and pleasure. My own “blissful hell” If only those walls could talk Rest assured the neighbors will be for awhile… The kitchen still smells like burning rubber Okay, I think I’ll leave that one alone. But the sweetest thing I do remember tasting Were those kisses you gave me Just as the sun would set And come pouring through the window… My eyes focus on the front door You must have walked through it And left a million times I could always count on you coming back As I get up to leave, I turn around I see myself still sitting there…. I realize That I can’t leave, I won’t ever leave. Some part of me will always sit there Waiting for you To walk back through that damn door. "driving down our favorite crash course with no headlights, we finally crash." |
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Dark_kisses_Within Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680Kansas |
Memories are always good to remember! But dont live in the past. I hope all is okay with you!  DkW No person is worth your tears, and the only one that is ...... will never make you cry |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
And you have recast a shadow or two of mine. Worth looking back at now and then. Thanks. |
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Baby G Junior Member
since 2001-01-28
Posts 39Australia |
Very sad and emotional write, I hope your feeling better after getting it all out. I loved it! |
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Lady Lost Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 470 |
Thanks for your responses, I am moving and it is good in a way, because you get to "start" over and create new memories, but sad at the same time because you need to mourn and let go of the house you created so many memories in.... ....bethann "I mean that loving you is strange and adored by me throughout..oh no it's you again, blessing you with every kiss..." [This message has been edited by Lady Lost (edited 02-02-2001).] |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
beth - this is one of your better poems I think. The style suits you!  i hear you about old and new memories. did something similar last year myself - turns out well in the end i think, though there are some memories it'd be nice to be able to relive. hugs C |
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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
well done. I could feel the emotions, the memories, feel the weight of being pulled forward and backward at the same time. Moving on is difficult, but in order to grow, we must move forward. Good write. With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free.. dragonpoe |
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He Junior Member
since 2001-01-15
Posts 41 |
Indeed we cast shadows short long times before color us all Well said "Emotion revealed as the ocean maid..." |
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Ginners Member
since 2000-07-22
Posts 339Mullica Hill, New Jersey |
Memories are the most important things we have, moving is always hard but you have new memories to look forward to |
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laryalee Member
since 2000-06-19
Posts 352Alberta, Canada |
Very realistic pictures - well portrayed! The poignancy of loss appears heavy, but it hasn't overcome you. Nicely done! Lary |
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nicolette Junior Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 42St. Paul, Minnesota |
very beautiful piece....nicely written. Memories are good, but so are fresh starts. Good luck with yours! |
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wandering Member
since 2001-01-21
Posts 92 |
I had read this a few days ago but wasn't able to respond as I had to get to work...but I felt a lot of emotion in this, lots of memories we recall leave us empty, sometimes happy, sometimes sad. I believe we do learn from them, and good or bad they lead us through life. thanks for the read. lost in thought, found in words. wanderer |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Reminds me of one of those day when I feel like I'm just struck right in the middle of life...need to move on...James |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
An excellent write, I too like the style. The memories are always a part of us though it can be good not to have so many reminders around us all the time. " I have seen without perceiving I have been another man Let me pierce the realm of glamour So I know just what I am"....Dweller on the Threshold, |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
I think many of us can relate to the "blissful hell" you speak of here. Excellent write, indeed. Michael |
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